Talk:Proteus (video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: New Age Retro Hippie (talk · contribs) 19:42, 17 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Starting. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 19:42, 17 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Anything I don't mention should be inferred to mean that the article fulfills the criteria.

Some of the writing is somewhat of an issue; it's fairly good, but it does need a bit of work. I've been working on it myself up until reception, which I will go into why in my next point. Specific things I fixed were the use of quotations, light repetition, overuse of commas, and the use of player versus players (using plural allows for the natural use of the word 'they').
The reception should be a summation of what critics say rather than quoting them; you should take some time to figure out the best way to naturally describe what they say without repeating the words that they use. Once that's done I'll look over the grammatical quality.
The lead could use a little bit of discussion surrounding specifics of the game's development.

Ping me when you feel you've fixed these things and I'll give it a once-over. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 20:07, 19 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Will take a look at rewriting the reception section soon. Samwalton9 (talk) 20:17, 19 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'd add shortlisting for the GameCity Prize to the reception too.[1][2]. - hahnch e n 03:37, 20 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I haven't forgotten about this, just so you know. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 21:46, 23 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Did a small bit of editing. My only concern is PlayStation Universe; what makes them a reliable source? - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 21:18, 25 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I would recommend that you use the Pocket Gamer review in its place if possible. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 21:20, 25 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The website seemed notable, I should have checked in greater detail, couldn't find any mention of it on the WP:VG sources page so I've replaced it with the Pocket Gamer review :) Samwalton9 (talk) 12:14, 26 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]

After a few fixes, I would say that it is acceptably GA status. - New Age Retro Hippie (talk) (contributions) 21:49, 28 November 2013 (UTC)[reply]