Talk:Propylhexedrine/GA2
GA Review #2
[edit]Passed
[edit]The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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Nominator: Irruptive Creditor (talk · contribs) 05:00, 30 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Reconrabbit (talk · contribs) 17:29, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Hello, I'm going to be reviewing this article. There have been major improvements to the text since the last GA nomination, but not everything has been addressed; hopefully that can be taken care of through the course of this review. I'm still working on reviewing sources and getting a full grasp on the prose corrections needed. Reconrabbit 17:29, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
- Summarily, as defined Merriam Webster, means the following: “In a few words”. It is no different then stating ‘in summation’ or ‘briefly put’. Irruptive Creditor (talk) 04:51, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
- Addressed the lead section and interactions. Irruptive Creditor (talk) 05:03, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
- The meaning of the word is understood. It's just an unusual construction to see in the encyclopedia style. Thank you for addressing the points noted here. Reconrabbit 16:37, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
- With respect to source [30], that is racemic. Generally, a drug product in the U.S. is assumed racemic or such unless otherwise indicated. See cetirizine (Zyretc) and levcetirizine (Xyzal). One is indicated simply as cetirizine, while the other is specifically indicated as levcetirizine. Irruptive Creditor (talk) 20:41, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
- I understand now. Corrected. Reconrabbit 23:54, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
- In regard to the matter of contraindications, I would say that the statement "Talk with the doctor before you give this drug to a child younger than 6 years old" is a contraindication. Generally, the entire point of an OTC drug is that it doesn't need physician supervision to administer. Perhaps, it could be reworded as "Propylhexedrine is not recommended in individuals younger than six years of age." Irruptive Creditor (talk) 02:12, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
- The oral tablet preparation is Obesin, an image thereof is shown in the Brand Names subheader. There it states the dose is 25mg. Since I cannot find much more about Obesin, I have corrected it. Irruptive Creditor (talk) 02:15, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
- All items that are of concern to this review have been addressed. Thank you for your work (and your patience, sorry about the delay!) Reconrabbit 19:06, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
- The oral tablet preparation is Obesin, an image thereof is shown in the Brand Names subheader. There it states the dose is 25mg. Since I cannot find much more about Obesin, I have corrected it. Irruptive Creditor (talk) 02:15, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
- In regard to the matter of contraindications, I would say that the statement "Talk with the doctor before you give this drug to a child younger than 6 years old" is a contraindication. Generally, the entire point of an OTC drug is that it doesn't need physician supervision to administer. Perhaps, it could be reworded as "Propylhexedrine is not recommended in individuals younger than six years of age." Irruptive Creditor (talk) 02:12, 16 May 2024 (UTC)
- I understand now. Corrected. Reconrabbit 23:54, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
- With respect to source [30], that is racemic. Generally, a drug product in the U.S. is assumed racemic or such unless otherwise indicated. See cetirizine (Zyretc) and levcetirizine (Xyzal). One is indicated simply as cetirizine, while the other is specifically indicated as levcetirizine. Irruptive Creditor (talk) 20:41, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
"Summarily" and the surrounding information summarizing the quotations above it isn't necessary. The main use of the phrase summarily on Wikipedia is in reference to summary execution, something I found trying to find other uses.Otherwise, understandable prose with the text only becoming technical when necessary.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
The lead section is extremely short and does not incorporate most of the relevant information from the article. Some things to include would be the history of the drug, possibly some preparation methods and society and culture information. Pseudoephedrine is a decent model of a similar decongestant with a better lead.
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose): {{GAList/check|?}
- Source check: (numbering based on this revision)
- [1]
- [2]
- [3]
Delivered dose amount is not indicated. Replaced with [30] which contains this information. - [4]
Dose size and oral tablet preparation is not mentioned. - [7]
- [9]
Does "Talk with the doctor before you give this drug to a child younger than 6 years old." mean the same thing as "contraindicated"? - [11]
- [12]
- [13]
- [14]
- [15] (though only based on abstract)
- [18]
- [19]
Cannot confirm that this supports the entirety of the "Interactions" section.
Done - [26]
- [27]
- [30]
Does not indicate the active ingredient is racemic. - [34]
- [35]
- [42]
- [45]
- [76]
- [81]
- [82]
- [1]
- Source check: (numbering based on this revision)
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Some quotes are a little long, but the FDA and IHA have no copyright on their work, which makes it less of a concern. I don't know what the status of the Army website is.
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- The photo of propylhexedrine HCl is of very low quality and also causes a WP:SANDWICH issue with the structure image on the other side of the page (though this isn't a huge issue). The same problem appears with Glenn E. Ullyot and the inhaler image and the photos of containers at the Brand Names header. It may be for the best if all of the product images are moved to the left and a {{Clear}} template is added at the end of "Eventin".
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.