Talk:Profound Morality/GA1

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Nominator: Chchcheckit (talk · contribs) 22:46, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 15:19, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this over the next few days :) Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 15:19, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you!! Chchcheckit (talk) 16:24, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

It is the band's first release as a quartet featuring guitarist and vocalist Debbie Gough, who joined in 2019 had they been a quartet before?
- This context is explained in the "Background and recording"; they formed as a trio. // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
in ~~the span of~~ five days filler words
inspired by the "rhetoric of wealth and class" attribute this better, avoid wikivoice making this proclamation. Could you also tell me what it means here?
- Probably more an attribution issue: This is what Debbie Gough said in this stereogum interview.

You guys wrote Profound Morality at the height of the pandemic. Did those circumstances influence how that EP turned out?
GOUGH: I think so, yeah. I think a lot of the points that we were trying to make come down to those two factors of wealth and class and how those influence the way that the world runs, or the way that life goes. And obviously speaking about the concept of morality and how class and wealth comes into that, that was really the most prominent time for everybody to think about it as a world. The divide was very, very clear and there was no real way of disguising that. And things were kinda tipped on its head, like key workers being people who previously the government would not have praised as key workers at all. I think it just allowed for you to ask more and more questions which led to the broader theme of the EP. I think that rhetoric of wealth and class during COVID definitely made a lasting impression us.

(Underline by me) // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

the morals of oneself and others when you say others, do you mean interpersonally? If not, it can just be cut to "morality"
During 2022, Heriot performed at several festivals including 2000trees... this sentence reads as a non-sequitur, link in the relationship with the album
supported ~~in the past~~ redundant
that allowed them to reinvent their sound and become more methodical about how they operated some puffery in this sentence, aim for more objectivity, careful with wikivoice
- Again quoting the band: rock sound: Jake: "As bad and weird as the lockdown was for everybody, we really tried to take advantage of that back in 2020. We tried to be a bit more methodical about how we did stuff, so we launched ourselves with the singles. and Knotfest: Gage - The lockdown ended up being a creative release for us in all honesty! With time on our hands, we’ve been able to really put our all into this new music and re-invent the band’s sound. I guess I could word/phrase this better. // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"so I think there was an element of trust in going with them." better integrate this quote
Soon after signing with Church Road, Heriot "quickly realised we actually had to make something", according to Gage. cut this
as they still wanted the freedom to experiment with their sound you need to attribute this. It is silly for Wikipedia to say that you can't experiment with your sound on an album
- Didn't clarify this well, my bad. Guitarist Erhan Alman better explained it in a recent interview: "[T]he only reason it’s taken until now to get the record written and released is that you only get one go on a debut album so we wanted to do ourselves justice and do it when it was the right time." // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
and the band subsequently "worked backward towards it" according to Gage what does this mean?
I don't think Abaddon is spelt like that. Same with Abattoir.
- it is spelt as such // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Boolin Tunes noted the videos for their "murky orange glow" MOS:SAID, I'm not sure what "noted" is doing here
no more than 400 people at a show, and for three nights in a row. reads awkwardly, the reader expects the second clause to also be modified by "no more than" but the "for" interrupts it.
the Dogtooth Stage why is this stage significant?
- In terms of popularity, I guess. They headlined it. If I find a better source I'll use it. // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Heriot performed at six more festivals; and then you list 5? Also, I think a colon rather than a semicolon is appropriate here
- OOPS // Chchcheckit (talk) 07:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Profound Morality received generally positive reviews from critics. I'm sorry to be awful, but can you cut this, unless it's sourced to reliable sources?
Though noting that Heriot more MOS:SAID

Suggestions

and they ultimately enjoyed the experience of playing there does this need three sources supporting it haha? There is some WP:REFCLUTTER throughout
In the tour section, you mention the year after every date. You don't need to do this, unless it has changed years, or it would be unexpected it's a new year.
You don't have to link concision (or really blame)

Sources

I see you attribute the Source interview to "falber", why do you do this? And if you are attributing it to falber, why do you not give the surname "Teles"?

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Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 03:41, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll respond to these slowly as I'm doing things, I'll ping you when done. Any blue text is quoting sources.Chchcheckit (talk) 07:28, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]