Talk:Professional employer organization/Archives/2012

External Links is history

As much as I hate to admit being wrong, I think SueHay was right when she said that having an External Links section in this article was a bad idea. I'm removing it, and moving the NAPEO link into the body text. P.A.C.E. is therefore being removed as link spam. I'm also going to make some other misc. edits after reviewing the past year's history. BWatkins (talk) 03:52, 18 October 2009 (UTC)

I removed it again. It's just a spam magnetBhny (talk) 17:25, 30 January 2012 (UTC)

Cleanup tags: advert, buzzword

I tagged this article for cleanup. Text like a single source provider of integrated services which enable business owners to cost-effectively outsource the management of human resources, employee benefits, payroll and workers’ compensation and other strategic services, such as, recruiting, risk/safety management, and training and development seems to me to contain an awful lot of peacock terms (single source, integrated, cost-effectively) as well as being full of buzzword style clichés as well. It seems rather skewed towards a presentation selling the benefit of this kind of service. I'd try to rewrite it in what would seem better style to me (a firm that provides a service under which an employer can outsource employee management tasks, (such as payroll, employee benefits, payroll and workers’ compensation) and human resources (such as recruiting, risk/safety management, and training and development.) In dealing with a jargony text like this, it's hard for me to tell if some nuance has been lost, and just about the entire text requires clarification and neutrality editing. - Smerdis of Tlön - killing the human spirit since 2003! 03:57, 19 July 2010 (UTC)

I agree, it's been mucked with since the last time I looked at it. I don't know when I'll have time to work on it, but maybe over the US Thanksgiving holidays I'll try to remove some of the promotional tone and clarify. BWatkins (talk) 14:02, 14 November 2010 (UTC)

I deleted a bunch of jargon and repetition Bhny (talk) 17:26, 30 January 2012 (UTC)