Talk:Priscilla Chan (singer)/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. —Ganesha811 (talk) 13:38, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Will629 (talk · contribs) 17:36, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Ganesha811 (talk · contribs) 19:54, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article using the template below. If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask them here. —Ganesha811 (talk) 19:54, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have a few things going on right now, but should be able to complete the first run-through of the review by Sunday evening. My apologies for the delay. —Ganesha811 (talk) 17:03, 18 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Please just take your time, actually I am quite busy too at the moment. Anyway, thank you very much for reviewing! Will629 (talk) 20:45, 18 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Will629, please let me know your thoughts on the issues described below. Thanks! —Ganesha811 (talk) 21:56, 22 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Will629, let me know when these issues are addressed. Otherwise the review will likely have to be closed in the next few days. —Ganesha811 (talk) 02:39, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Closing due to nominator non-response, without prejudice towards renomination. Thanks for your work on this article but it's not at the GA standard as of today, with no improvements made during the review. Please be sure to address the issues below if you renominate. —Ganesha811 (talk) 13:38, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	There are consistent grammatical errors, run-on sentences, and confusing construction. A thorough scrub for these issues is required to meet GA status, perhaps with assistance from the WP:GUILD of copyeditors.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	On source reliability, can you tell me a little more about these sources and why they are reliable/independent enough? Localiiz Universal Music Hong Kong UMWebzine Sohu Entertainment Wah Kiu Yat Po 凸週刊 NetEase Entertainment Can you add a English translation for titles/authors which are missing it, such as 漫遊八十年代——聽廣東歌的好日子? Much of the article seems to be cited to her albums directly, awards ceremonies, or interviews with Chan. This is an issue as it may imply OR and a non-independent perspective.
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Earwig picks up nothing egregious, hold for manual spot check.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Why is this sort of vague, generic detail included? As a teenager, Chan would often take part in extracurricular activities., When Chan was still a primary six student, she already participated in the annual garden party, in celebration of Queen Elizabeth II's birthday, at the Government House held by the Government of British Hong Kong on behalf of the Marymount Primary School, and even shook hands with Sir Murray MacLehose (麥理浩), the then Governor of Hong Kong, her father and her fans saw her off at the Kai Tak Airport, where a large number of media reporters were also present, (GPA 3.66/4.00), Besides her parents, Michael Au, who had already broken up with Chan around 1991, Au's wife, and Jacky Cheung attended Chan's graduation ceremony held in the Syracuse University's campus, The death of her beloved cat, Remington, also watched Chan's concert and the two took a photo together In general, the number of mentions of performing concerts can be reduced; that is standard fare for a pop singer and most concerts are probably not individually important. Summarize these things with mentions like "toured extensively" or "held a small series of concerts" etc.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	On first read through, this article appears to be written from a fan's point of view rather than a neutral, encyclopedic description. This is a common problem for articles about singers and other entertainers. The article reads like a list of awards won and charts topped, rather than any kind of objective description of her career and impact. There is a lot of extraneous detail that wouldn't interest someone who wasn't already a fan of hers. While a few here and there (well-cited) might be acceptable, phrases like one of the all-time Cantopop classics, was a huge success that not only topped the charts and was awarded the "Most Popular Disco Song", Chan rebounded nicely, Chan's retro-styled stage presence, accompanied by varied, vintage outfits and hatwears also became one of her most iconic images throughout her singing career, the highly anticipated winner of the year's "Jade Solid Gold Best Ten Music Awards: Gold Award", one of her most classic performances that also featured the farewell theme,, the chart-topping hit, all became instant hits, she also criticised the general preference of Cantopop audience at that time, who she believed were only interested in admiring the artists' images but not in truly appreciating their music, etc. There are tons of these.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.

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