Talk:Pretty Please (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will start this today, though it won't be done until at least tomorrow. --K. Peake 09:37, 13 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good!
Add a comma after second studio album
"and the song's producer" → "and the sole producer"
Add a sentence between the writing/production and genres one about how the song was created
"is the opposite. In the lyrics," → "is the opposite; in the lyrics,"
Remove the usage of very per this not being sourced in the body
"reached number 48, 79 and" → "reached numbers 48, 79 and"
"was awarded a gold certification from" → "was awarded a gold certification in Canada from"
"remix album Club Future Nostalgia." → "remix album, Club Future Nostalgia (2020)."
Mention that the festival was in 2022 and use "that same year" later on in the sentence

Background and production

Img looks good!
Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Pipe mastered to Mastering (audio)
"a bunch of music" I don't think this is appropriate language for Wiki
Wikilink bassline
"before the chorus. Kirkpatrick used" → "before the chorus and Kirkpatrick used" with the pipe
Wikilink tempo
Pipe percussion to Percussion instrument
"lag a bit" is this really appropriate language?
"He used LFO tool" → "Kirkpatrick used LFO tool"
"Kirkpatrick used the LFO tool to make" → "The tool also had the purpose of making"
"He also used a" → "Kirkpatrick further used a"
Pipe snare to Snare drum
Img looks good!
"decided to leave it in" → "decided to leave the instrument in"
"he wanted to make it" → "the producer wanted to make it"
"in the hook. Kirkpatrick used an" → "in the hook and used an"
"he included a part from" → "the producer included a section from"
Wikilink melodyne per MOS:LINK2SECT

Music and lyrics

Remove wikilink on midtempo
Remove wikilink on tempo
[12][13][14][15][9] is too many refs grouped together, so move some around to the appropriate areas of the sentence
[19] should only be invoked once in the sentence
Wikilink synthesizer
"for stress-reliving" → "for stress-relieving" on the audio sample text
"the live bass. This chorus also introduces a beeping sounds." → "the live bass while beeping sounds are introduced."
Wikilink tambourine
I don't think spine-tingling is very neutral here
"when she sings" → "when Lipa sings"
"but realizing that unlike them." what does this mean? Please clarify...
"sums up the song's" → "sum up the song's"

Release and promotion

Img looks good!
Wikilink lyric video per MOS:LINK2SECT
"released on 9 April." → "released on 9 April 2020."
Pipe New York house to Garage house
Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
Pipe Tiny Desk Concert to Tiny Desk Concerts

Reception

"on Future Nostalgia saying" → "on Future Nostalgia, saying"
"called it a "slinky" monster and stated it's" → "called the song a "slinky" monster and stated it is"
"complimented "airtight" and" → "complimented the "airtight" and"
"Writing for, Pitchfork Anna Gaca noted" → "For Pitchfork, Anna Gaca noted"
Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
"a "flurry of" → "a "flurr[y] of" per alteration of the source
"called it a" → "labeled the song a"
"The Midland refix was nominated" → "The Midland remix was nominated"
"79 in Slovakia and 101" → "number 79 in Slovakia and number 101"

Track listings

Add the appropriate sources for these

Personnel

Good

Charts

Good

Certifications

Good

References

Copyvio score looks incredible at 9.1%!!!!
Remove or replace ref 17 per WP:RSP
Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead on ref 32
On ref 49, is the first citation really reliable when it is aligned as far-right? Also, cite Universo Online and Trome as publishers instead.

External links

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 19:59, 14 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

✗ Fail after no response; this is disappointing from an experienced user like LOVI33. --K. Peake 07:42, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Rework, following indications contained in User:Kyle Peake's review (thanks)

Infobox and lead

Add a comma after second studio album Done
"and the song's producer" → "and the sole producer" Done
Add a sentence between the writing/production and genres one about how the song was created Done
"is the opposite. In the lyrics," → "is the opposite; in the lyrics," Done
Remove the usage of very per this not being sourced in the body Done
"reached number 48, 79 and" → "reached numbers 48, 79 and" Done
"was awarded a gold certification from" → "was awarded a gold certification in Canada from" Done
"remix album Club Future Nostalgia." → "remix album, Club Future Nostalgia (2020)." Done
Mention that the festival was in 2022 and use "that same year" later on in the sentence Done

-My, oh my! (Mushy Yank) 02:20, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Background and production

Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Pipe mastered to Mastering (audio)
"a bunch of music" I don't think this is appropriate language for Wiki
Wikilink bassline
"before the chorus. Kirkpatrick used" → "before the chorus and Kirkpatrick used" with the pipe
Wikilink tempo
Pipe percussion to Percussion instrument
"lag a bit" is this really appropriate language?
"He used LFO tool" → "Kirkpatrick used LFO tool"
"Kirkpatrick used the LFO tool to make" → "The tool also had the purpose of making"
"He also used a" → "Kirkpatrick further used a"
Pipe snare to Snare drum
"decided to leave it in" → "decided to leave the instrument in"
"he wanted to make it" → "the producer wanted to make it"
"in the hook. Kirkpatrick used an" → "in the hook and used an"
"he included a part from" → "the producer included a section from"
Wikilink melodyne per MOS:LINK2SECT

---> Done-My, oh my! (Mushy Yank) 15:29, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Music and lyrics

Remove wikilink on midtempo
Remove wikilink on tempo
[12][13][14][15][9] is too many refs grouped together, so move some around to the appropriate areas of the sentence
[19] should only be invoked once in the sentence
Wikilink synthesizer
"for stress-reliving" → "for stress-relieving" on the audio sample text
"the live bass. This chorus also introduces a beeping sounds." → "the live bass while beeping sounds are introduced."
Wikilink tambourine
I don't think spine-tingling is very neutral here
"when she sings" → "when Lipa sings"
"but realizing that unlike them." what does this mean? Please clarify...
"sums up the song's" → "sum up the song's"

>

Done-My, oh my! (Mushy Yank) 21:43, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

Wikilink lyric video per MOS:LINK2SECT
"released on 9 April." → "released on 9 April 2020."
Pipe New York house to Garage house
Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
Pipe Tiny Desk Concert to Tiny Desk Concerts

--> Done

Reception

"on Future Nostalgia saying" → "on Future Nostalgia, saying"
"called it a "slinky" monster and stated it's" → "called the song a "slinky" monster and stated it is"--> NOTE: See below//Ref (partly removed) was this the idea?
"complimented "airtight" and" → "complimented the "airtight" and"
"Writing for, Pitchfork Anna Gaca noted" → "For Pitchfork, Anna Gaca noted"
Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
"a "flurry of" → "a "flurr[y] of" per alteration of the source
"called it a" → "labeled the song a"
"The Midland refix was nominated" → "The Midland remix was nominated" Not done it's the title of the remix, "refix".
"79 in Slovakia and 101" → "number 79 in Slovakia and number 101"

---> Done except where indicated otherwise.

References

Remove or replace ref 17 per WP:RSP-> Not done: there's no real consensus about Evening Standard, and that particular article seems good Not done If that was removed, we would have to remove "a thick, steady groove, disco strings", which describes the song quite accurately.
Cite Dancing Astronaut as publisher instead on ref 32---> Done (now ref 31)
On ref 49, is the first citation really reliable when it is aligned as far-right? Also, cite Universo Online and Trome as publishers instead.---> Done

-My, oh my! (Mushy Yank) 22:02, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Question

Add the appropriate sources for track listing? Other DL GA do not have sources for TL and durations. Do we need sources?-My, oh my! (Mushy Yank) 21:48, 30 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.