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Useful Links– History Section

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https://books.google.com.au/books?id=q9G5TdHXBlIC&pg=PA12&source=gbs_toc_r&cad=1#v=onepage&q&f=true
https://parliament.vic.gov.au/images/From_Westminster_to_Spring_Street_transcript.pdf
https://web.archive.org/web/20220518122430/https://parliament.vic.gov.au/images/Education/Unit_4_AOS_1_-_Student_Learning_Activity.pdf
https://web.archive.org/web/20220309112628/https://www.parliament.vic.gov.au/assembly/publications-a-research/fact-sheets/2-legislative-assembly/articles/2462-fact-sheet-i1
https://web.archive.org/web/20211203165333/https://parliament.vic.gov.au/assembly/publications-a-research/fact-sheets/2-legislative-assembly/articles/2491-fact-sheet-h1#premier
https://web.archive.org/web/20220301194125/https://www.parliament.vic.gov.au/premiers-portraits-sp-221369035
https://web.archive.org/web/20220301235859/https://www.parliament.vic.gov.au/about/people-in-parliament/premier-of-victoria ––– GMH MELBOURNE 13:56, 8 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GMH Melbourne (talk) 03:27, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Vaticidalprophet talk 10:04, 12 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Statue of Sir Rupert Hamer, former Victorian Premier
Statue of Sir Rupert Hamer, former Victorian Premier

Moved to mainspace by GMH Melbourne (talk). Self-nominated at 13:13, 9 October 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Premier of Victoria; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.[reply]

  • The article is new enough and long enough. QPQ doesn't yet apply to the nominator. The hook is cited with a citation from the article and interesting. No issues with image, perhaps link Rupert Hamer in the caption? The article is broadly of a decent quality but earwig noted a lot of overlap with this page which I would advise the nominator to look at. More detail can be seen here. Llewee (talk) 22:11, 11 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
OK, apologies, I did not see that. No problems then. Llewee (talk) 06:24, 12 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Unilateral move

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A recent discussion on separating the list of premiers of Victoria from this article ended in a consensus not to move. It appears the original submitter has unilaterally ignored this and created a separate article for the list anyway. Victoria is now inconsistent with all the other articles on premiers/CMs. I was a soft oppose in the move request, prepared to reconsider if the articles (emphasis on articles, plural) became too long and unwieldy. Most importantly, there needs to be consistency across all articles for state/territory heads of government. The fact the consensus has been immediately defied means that I would like to request the list be immediately restored to this article and a new discussion opened about whether to split all the lists of premiers/CMs. Axver (talk) 09:41, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Support - list should be returned Totallynotarandomalt69 (talk) 09:48, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Splitting proposal

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See here for discussion: Talk:List of premiers of Victoria#Splitting proposal GMH Melbourne (talk) 02:42, 22 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

National Cabinet

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Hi GMH Melbourne, I noticed you have nominated this article for GA. I just remembered a suggestion I was going to make ages ago... In the infobox there is a link to National Cabinet. This is the only mention in the article. As it is a rather important function of the premier can I suggest adding something explaining their representation on the forum, perhaps in the 'Powers and role' section? JennyOz (talk) 04:14, 21 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, I will make the addition. GMH Melbourne (talk) 06:44, 21 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done GMH Melbourne (talk) 03:54, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Unsuccessful. SSSB (talk) 07:10, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: GMH Melbourne (talk · contribs) 04:59, 22 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: SSSB (talk · contribs) 19:52, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this review on, before we reach 250 days in the queue. SSSB (talk) 19:52, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Comments

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Improvements necessary for promotion

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 Done
  • In the opening sentence, you've put premier of Victoria, with a lowercase p. But in the second sentence, Cabinet of Victoria gets an uppercase. This looks odd, if nothing else. Can I suggest that when we have the title "Premier of Victoria", we capitilise Premier? Likewise with Goverenor of Victoria. SSSB (talk) 18:32, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I believe the current format is correct under WP:JOBTITLES as "premier of Victoria" refers to the office of the premier rather than one person imparticlar and "Cabinet of Victoria" refers to a body/organisation (similar to Parliament of Victoria). GMH Melbourne (talk) 03:17, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I've just had a look at the articles of other states, and nations, and I am not going to argue this point here as it is done this way across all articles. SSSB (talk) 07:30, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The description of how the premier is appointed isn't great. Its chucky and hard to follow. I would ditch ",meaning the support of a majority of Legislative Assembly members." The concept of commanding confidence is quite common. And for those who don't know what this means, there is a wikilink. The following sentence should start "The premier", instead of "this". SSSB (talk) 18:32, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done reworded
 Done
 Done
 Done
  • "when its constitution" should be "when the constitution"
 Done
  • "Victoria's first election re-elected Haines," no it didn't. Because the premier isn't directly elected. It needs to be something like "Victoria's first election allowed Haines to retain the premiership" The second half of this sentence will need rewording accordingly. SSSB (talk) 18:32, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done reworded
 Done
 Done changed source
 Done couldn't find any other source so I removed the sentence.
 Done
 Done also added supporting citation.
  • I don't think we need a breakdown of what the national cabinet is. But if this stays it needs rewording. The national cabinet does not exist to "to coordinate national priorities with the premier of Victoria". It exists to coordinate national priorities with the governments of all the states, of which Victoria is one. SSSB (talk) 22:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done removed explanation
  • Can we get a secondary source for this please? "Changes to the premier's salary are determined by the Victorian Independent Remuneration Tribunal". Because the current source does not say this. SSSB (talk) 22:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
 Done added source
  • The history section feels incomplete. We talk about difficulty in finding a consistent premeier between 1855 and 1863. And then jump to changes in government from 1901 until the 1950s. Can we try to fill this gap please. SSSB (talk) 22:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Other suggestions

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"The shortest-serving premier was George Elmslie, also the first premier from the Labor Party, who served for 13 days." I would ditch "also the". SSSB (talk) 18:32, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

    •  Done
  • The history section isn't long enough to justify sub headings for pre and post federalisation. If these are kept it needs to be Post federalisation, not post federalism. Federalism is still ongoing in Australia. SSSB (talk) 18:32, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Elections are held every four years, on ..." no need for this to be its own paragragh. SSSB (talk) 22:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done
  • "Premiers who hold the office for 3,000 days ..." in brackets can we have a breakdown of how many years and months this is? To avoid readers having to do some mental maths. SSSB (talk) 22:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    •  Done

Final comments

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There are a few things that need adressing. But nothing to major. SSSB (talk) 22:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@SSSB: Thank you so much for your suggestions, I have addressed most of the above issues in this edit. I have made a few questions/comments above in bold underneath the corresponding dot point. RE the history section, I will hopefully get that completed within the next couple of day and ping you when ready. GMH Melbourne (talk) 03:17, 30 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comment. I would also agree the "History" section needs substantial work and is currently not at good article standard. There's very little discussion of how the premier's role has evolved over time, e.g. the several constitutional crises in the 19th century where the primacy of the premier (and Legislative Assembly) over the governor and Legislative Council were established, the historical roles in foreign policy (attending Colonial Conferences) and defence (responsibility for the Victorian Military Forces). There's no discussion of how the role changed upon federation in 1901 and the basics of federation are effectively assumed knowledge on the reader, which won't necessarily be true. The Costar/Strangio source appears to be the only academic source used and has very limited use, I think this should be read through fully and made much more use of. Also the article seems to be based on the premise that the office of premier exists solely by convention (as implied in the infobox). This is not quite true; unlike the federal constitution the word "premier" is mentioned 20 times in the state constitution. There is currently no discussion of this in the article. There's also no mention of the Department of Premier and Cabinet (other than in the infobox) and its role. I T B F 📢 01:18, 7 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Thank you for your comments @ITBF, and thank you for your review @SSSB. There is quite a bit of work required to get this upto GA, probably best to fail this at the moment. I will work on it and resubmit later. Thank you for your suggestions! GMH Melbourne (talk) 04:52, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Failed at this time. I look forward to seeing this again when you expand the hostory section a bit. SSSB (talk) 07:09, 12 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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