Talk:Precursors of film
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[edit]As it stands, this is just text moved over verbatim from the beginning of the History of Film article, where a lot of this didn't comfortably fit. Could use plenty more development. Michael Wells 03:42, 13 October 2005 (UTC)
Ambiguities of reference make bullet points unreadable
[edit]- "Mo-Ti, a Chinese philosopher ponders the phenomenology" "phenomenology" is to technical for general history reader, especially since it has a meaning in philosophy that is related but not what Mo-Ti was pondering. maybe use "phonomenon"? Tautologist (talk) 21:30, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- "Alhazen experiments with the same... " - It is not clear whata the "the same" refers to, espeically if someone inserts an unrelated historical development before this. Need to change "the same" to what is specifically referred to. I would do it, but I can't tell which of the precursors was being referred to. Tautologist (talk) 21:30, 28 September 2008 (UTC)
- "Leonardo ... describes... a structure that would produce this effect" - "this effect" could refer to anyting that precedes this, which could change with any edit. Need to specify what "this" refers to. Tautologist (talk) 21:30, 28 September 2008 (UTC)