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Reviewer: The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 01:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC) Hi. I'll be reviewing this article as part of April's GAN Backlog Elimination Log. See Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my review style. Address the below comments; meanwhile, I've placed the article on hold. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 01:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • Does Ann have her own article? And if not, wikilink to the character's list?
  • "digs up dirt" — a bit slang-ish, wouldn't you say?
  • "an improvement over the previous week's episode, "Beauty Pageant.""

Plot

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  • Again, "find any dirt": bit slangish. Same with the later uses of the word.
  • Replace the period after "problem" with a colon.
  • "he's" → "he is"
  • "awesome I am" → "how "awesome" she is."
  • I'm a bit confused: did Mark dig up dirt on himself or Jerry?

Production

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Cultural references

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Reception

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Images

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Final say

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Nice work! I'm going to go pass this. Congrats and happy editing. The Flash I am Jack's complete lack of surprise 19:05, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]