Talk:Powers, Principalities, Thrones and Dominions/GA1

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 04:46, 29 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Plot: "Watts contacts Black for help with the case. However, Black is still recovering from the murder of his friend Bob Bletcher" Is this in the present, or are we still in flashback mode?
Everything after Pepper being zapped at the start is a flashback leading up to that scene being repeated from a different POV at the end; I've clarified that a little in the plot now. GRAPPLE X 02:41, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Plot: "...as evidence disappears or witnesses fail to identify him in a line-up..." I would change 'or' to 'and'
Done. GRAPPLE X 02:41, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Production: "...as well as directing..." -> "...as well as direct..."
Done. GRAPPLE X 02:41, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Reception: Maybe its just me, but although the DVD Talk review is sort of mixed, all the rest seem to be positive, so I'd change "mixed to positive" to "moderately positive" or something of the like
Done, as "mostly positive". GRAPPLE X 02:41, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
References: Ref 14 has the wrong title attached to it
References: Ref 15 has the wrong title attached to it
Wow, that was sloppy of me. Got both of those. GRAPPLE X 02:41, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Those are the only issues (aside from the fact that I love the Oxford Comma and this title doesn't have one, but I digress) that I could find. On hold.--Gen. Quon (talk) 23:38, 29 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, I'm usually a serial comma man myself despite it being rare in Europe. Not sure why. Thanks again for another good review! GRAPPLE X 02:41, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No problem. Everything looks good; I pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:36, 30 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]