Talk:Powerful-class cruiser/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 20:58, 20 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Mostly nitpicks:

"...required, meant..." a "which" is needed there.
- I dunno, I think that the dependent clause before the comma obviates the need for "which"
  - Cut out a lot of the text and you get "White's studies [led to conclusion 'X'], meant that a very large ship was necessary..." "Which" is necessary for the sentence to work correctly. Parsecboy (talk) 15:42, 22 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:51, 22 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Is it "criticized" or "criticised?" I know BrEng tends to use an "s" instead of a "z", but some of these are irregular too, IIRC
- I'll change it to an "s", but I'm not sure either as my online dictionary doesn't specify which is which.
"the largest crew in the RN" - best to specify that it was the largest at that time.
Ditto for the coal bunkers
"The ships generally used Harvey armour." - the obvious question is, what wasn't Harvey armor?
- Burt contradicted himself in the article, so I tried to weasel-word my way out of specifying which one were mild steel.
How were the 6-inch guns added in 1902-3 fed? Just with a supply of ready ammunition? Or were men supposed to ferry shells from the other magazines?
- Not specified, but most likely the latter as I don't think that any of the six inch guns had their own ammo hoists.
File:Powerful class cruiser diagram Brasseys 1897.jpg - needs a US tag
The Jane's ref is not cited (and has a harv error).
- Deleted.

Thanks for the review. Lemme know if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:06, 22 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, everything seems to be in order, happy to promote. Parsecboy (talk) 20:47, 22 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]