Talk:Potong Pasir MRT station/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 01:33, 9 January 2021 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Prose, POV, and coverage

Lead

• Potong Pasir station is also in close proximity to Saint Andrew's Village - I think "close" would work in place of "in close proximity".
• The station was first announced as Sennett MRT station - at which time? Can it be clarified whether it was part of the original NEL plan?
• with allegations that the station will be opened - this should probably be "would be" instead of "will be", since it's a conditional statement.
• Eventually, in 2002, the station was announced to be opened along with the NEL stations - I would say "along with the other NEL stations" since this implies the station is part of another line.

History

• In the planning stages of the NEL - When was this?
  • 1995  Done
• There were claims that the station (along with Woodleigh, another station in Potong Pasir) will - As above, this should probably be "would" instead of "will"
  •  Fixed
• PAP candidate, Andy Gan, had promised residents he would push for the earlier construction of the MRT stations - the two commas in this case aren't necessary.
  •  Fixed
• Eventually, the station was set to be opened with the other NEL stations - What made the ruling party change their mind? Come to think about it, what was the ruling party?
  •  Fixed added note to PAP as ruling party
• Initially, the station was planned to be just a "shell station", but it was decided to build the whole station itself as it would be more expensive for the station to be fitted later
  • It might be good to add a link to infill station
  •  Fixed
  • I don't think the reflexive pronoun "itself" is the best wording. Maybe "at once", e.g. "but it was decided to build the whole station at once as it would be more expensive to build an infill station later"
  • Also, usually I've heard the phrase as "station shell".
    • In Singapore for some reason we say shell station.--ZKang123 (talk) 03:30, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
• The station was constructed using the top-down method - I'm not sure what this is. This could refer to a cut and cover, or digging a shaft and then excavating the underlying station vault.
  • LTA's definition: https://www.lta.gov.sg/content/dam/ltagov/getting_around/public_transport/rail_network/pdf/topdown_final.pdf --ZKang123 (talk) 03:30, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
    • I see. So basically it's the top-down method of cut-and-cover construction. Epicgenius (talk) 18:28, 10 January 2021 (UTC)

More later. Epicgenius (talk) 17:31, 9 January 2021 (UTC)

• During the construction, residents have complained about the noise generated from the site. - "have" is not necessary, since it is no longer ongoing. I would replace it with "had".
• During the construction, residents had complained about the noise generated from the site. These complaints were answered promptly with explanations to residents on the works. - Can this be combined into one sentence? E.g. "During the construction, residents had complained about the noise generated from the site, which [the LTA] answered promptly by giving residents explanations on the works." (I don't know if it was the LTA that gave the explanations, hence the brackets).

Station details

• The name Potong Pasir means "cut sand" in Malay, getting the name from the former activities of sand quarries in the area - "getting the name from" is an unusual wording, and probably a misplaced modifier. How about "referring to"? E.g. "The name Potong Pasir means "cut sand" in Malay, referring to the former activities of sand quarries in the area."
• from a former British Commissioner of Lands C.W.A Sennett - this should be "from former British Commissioner". The indefinite article "a" isn't needed when the person is named.
• The station is near prominent landmarks such as the Potong Pasir Community Club, Masjid Alkaff (Upper Serangoon), the Muslim Trust Fund Association, the Sri Sivadurga Temple and the St. Andrews' Village which includes the schools of St. Andrew's Junior College, St. Andrew's Junior School and the St. Andrew's Secondary School. - Do any of these have articles? In any case I would remove "prominent", since a hidden landmark would not make sense.
• Public Artwork header - this should be sentence case, i.e. "Public artwork".
• As part of the MRT system's Art-in-Transit Programme, - this should probably be "Commissioned as part of..." because the information after the comma can be a full standalone sentence. As such, the clause before the comma should have a verb, because the sentence should make sense if it were flipped, e.g. Point of View by Matthew Ngui is a series of anamorphic images and text displayed all around the station, as part of the MRT system's Art-in-Transit Programme.
• The seven images include a row of HDB (Housing Development Board) apartments - Should the initialism come after the name of the board?
• For the text fragments, Ngui has urged the participants to write about issues "closest to them" so as to produce text relevant to the masses. - this should be "Ngui had urged the participants" unless it's still ongoing.
• In general, this is neutrally presented and has a nice breadth of information.

References

• I'm seeing numerous harv-template errors with the reference "Leong 2003". Should this not be "Chan Teik 2003"? Never mind, this is a standard Chinese name, but I see this has been fixed Epicgenius (talk) 15:58, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
• For ref 19 (of this revision), is there a better source besides Google Maps? For example, a map made by the Singapore government? Google Maps is all right, but should be used basically as a source of last resort.
• For ref 23, the language code is wrong.
• For refs 25, 27 and 28, the publisher and work parameters should be standardised, i.e. |publisher=Land Transport Authority.

Images and copyright

• Images are appropriately licensed.
• Copyright violation check comes up clean.

General comments

•  On hold Epicgenius (talk) 18:28, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
  • Passing now, great work. Epicgenius (talk) 01:37, 11 January 2021 (UTC)