Talk:Portia labiata/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Unionhawk (talk · contribs) 16:49, 17 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

Well-written:

(a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct; and

(b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.

Verifiable with no original research:

(a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;

(b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose); and

(c) it contains no original research.

Broad in its coverage:

(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic; and

(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:

(a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content; and

(b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

Quick fail checks

Stable
No tags
Images captioned and tagged
No NPOV issues

Automated tools

Peer Reviewer

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Consider adding more links to the article; per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (links) and Wikipedia:Build the web, create links to relevant articles.^[?]
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This article may need to undergo summary style, where a series of appropriate subpages are used. For example, if the article is United States, then an appropriate subpage would be History of the United States, such that a summary of the subpage exists on the mother article, while the subpage goes into more detail.^[?]
Please make the spelling of English words consistent with either American or British spelling, depending upon the subject of the article. Examples include: behavior (A) (British: behaviour), behaviour (B) (American: behavior), moustache (B) (American: mustache), meter (A) (British: metre), metre (B) (American: meter), defence (B) (American: defense), recognise (B) (American: recognize), isation (B) (American: ization), paralyse (B) (American: paralyze), moult (B) (American: molt).
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Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.^[?]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.

Note that many of these suggestions have WP:WIAFA in mind, instead of WP:WIAGA.

Others

No disambiguation links
1 dead link, but it says there's a WebCite archive available. I don't see it, but WebCite's server has been a little screwy lately.
- The "Jumping spiders (Araneae: Salticidae) that feed on nectar" is now in play-wall. --Philcha (talk) 17:26, 18 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - It looks like another one just died, but there are plenty of Wayback results, so it shouldn't be an issue.--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 11:59, 19 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - The "one just died" is a External links - removed. --Philcha (talk) 16:08, 19 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Checks from reviewer

Clear and concise

~~As has been pointed out, the article uses inconsistent British/American spellings. This needs to be fixed to satisfy 1(a). Either one is correct, just be consistent.~~
- It should be British spellings, as the main expert, Jackson, is from New Zealand. I've check again and saw no American spellings. What American spellings do you see. --Philcha (talk) 21:07, 17 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Upon closer inspection, the only american spellings are in reference titles, which is probably the correct way to do it.--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 13:52, 18 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The lead is a bit long, but it does meet the 4 paragraph guideline. I'll look over it a bit more when I look at 3(b)
- Lead meets guidelines.--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 14:57, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Layout is good
Fiction is n/a
Subject/verb agreement: Section 1 paragraph 3: "Behind the mouth is a pair of pedipalps ("palps" for short),[1] and those of male spiders are quite large and are used for displaying and mating.[3]"--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 15:08, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "... a male spider's are quite large, and are used for displaying and mating." --Philcha (talk) 20:58, 20 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fixed--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 12:21, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Same issue: Section 7: "These occasionally including grappling that sometimes breaks a leg, but more usually the final move is a lunge."--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 12:40, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "more usually one female lunges at the other". --Philcha (talk) 16:53, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fixed, Pass on 1(a) and 1(b)--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 17:06, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Verifiable

Pass on 2(a), 2(b), and 2(c)--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 12:48, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Broad

Pass on 3(a).--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 13:05, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Problems with 3(b):
- Section 1 seems to go into some unnecessary detail about spiders in general. While some of these details are excellent summaries that lead into details specific to Portia labiata, others (e.g. "Spiders maintain balance when walking, so that legs 1 and 3 on one side and 2 and 4 on the other side are moving, while the other four legs are on the surface. To run faster, spiders increase their stride frequency.[14]:328") are only relevant because they are related to spiders.--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 13:05, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Remove "Spiders maintain balance when walking, ...". --Philcha (talk) 16:20, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - Fixed, Pass on 3(b)--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 16:45, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Neutral/Stable/Images

All good (see #Quick fail checks)

Final checklist

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Congratulations, and keep up the good work.--Unionhawk ^Talk ^E-mail 17:09, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. --Philcha (talk) 18:58, 21 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]