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GA Review

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Reviewer: Starstriker7(Talk) 04:17, 2 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this review. --Starstriker7(Talk) 04:17, 2 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Criterion 1 (concise, clear prose; good grammar/spelling; complies with MOS' lead, layout, W2W, fiction, and list incorp guidelines)

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Lead

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  • "This in turn results in an increased crime-rate, to which the police are powerless." - This line just seems a tad awkward to me. Can you rephrase it?

Plot

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  • "a huge riot and looting occur" --> widespread rioting and looting occur?
  • "house, someone stole" --> house, someone steals
  • "Homer decides to take action by finding it." --> Home decides to take action by looking for it?
  • "more efficient and successful" --> more efficient and more successful?
  • "citizens he protected" --> citizens he protects
  • "Maggie, who fired at the mobsters" --> Maggie, who fires at the mobsters

Production

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  • "After having moved in" --> After moving in,
  • "instructing the audince" - Well... :P
  • "High Noon, however, the line" --> High Noon, although the line
  • "which Gould was a "big fan" of." --> of which Gould was a "big fan".

Cultural references

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  • "Homer tells Marge about all the jobs he has had" - Can you work this in such a way so that "had" is in the present tense?
  • "one of his ferrets are" --> one of his ferrets is

Release and reception

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  • "Stuart O'Connor was favorable as" --> Stuart O'Connor's review was favorable as

Criterion 2 (all info cited by inline cites in a ref section; reliable sources cover challengeable materials; NOR)

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  • All the refs check out. My only comment here is what I asked in the past two episode reviews I've done, I feel that you should cite the statistics in the lead.

Criterion 3 (addresses main aspects of topic; stays focused)

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All set here!

Criterion 4 (no undue weight)

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Looks good here. :)

Criterion 5 (stable)

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The edit history checks out.

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The Mantegna image checks out.

Overall comments

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This review took a surprisingly short amount of time. Congrats on another great article. It will be officially a good article after you address the few nitpicky comments I've raised. :) --Starstriker7(Talk) 05:47, 2 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the thorough review! :) Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:57, 2 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You are welcome! I'm passing the article now. --Starstriker7(Talk) 22:16, 2 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]