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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:35, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Any reason why the infobox doesn't have an "open" year?
    •  Done
  • I believe there's also a toll parameter in there too that seems appropriate?
  • Curious mix of "Bridgeport, Connecticut" and "Bridgeport (Connecticut)".
    •  Done
  • "bridge" appears five times in the first three sentences which makes for repetitive prose.
    •  Done
  • "The bridge burned in " do you mean "The bridge was damaged by fire in..."
    •  Done Rewrote in a different way
  • "it will become an undisturbed protected salt match or to be revitalized" doesn't flow correctly for me, perhaps just remove the last "to".
    •  Done
  • " failed to materialize " makes it sound ethereal. Perhaps "did not commence"?
    •  Done
  • "riveted Warren through-truss.[1]:20–21 A Warren truss consists of longitudinal" would make better reading if you merged these, to, say "riveted Warren through-truss,[1]:20–21 consisting of longitudinal...."
    •  Done
  • Consider adding {{convert}} to provide metric measurements alongside the Imperial units you've used.
    •  Done
  • You use the same reference for five consecutive sentences in the History section, this is slightly overkill if you ask me.
    • I prefer overkill to underkill... I really believe in being able to pull the exact source for seemingly trivial pieces of information.
  • "Repairs were done on the " -> "Repairs were made to the "
    •  Done
  • "the fire" is mentioned four times in three sentences, again a little repetitive.
    • Fixed.
  • "Estimations " why not just "Estimates"?
    • Fixed.
  • " throughout the years." not sure this is necessary at all.
    • Fixed
  • "but did not materialize" see above, same comment applies here.
    • Fixed
  • " Connecticut Audubon " who or what is this?
  • "delayed repeatedly into 2013...." update?
  • New York Times is The New York Times, be consistent with italics too.
    • Fixed.
  • Things like the "Connecticut Post" are presumably newspapers so should be shown in italics. Check the other refs.
    • I had Publisher instead of Work fields. So I fixed that.
  • "Connecticute Department of Transportation." ref 1, I assume that should be "..cut" not "...cute"?
  • This source which refers to a book about Bridgeport disagrees with the year the bridge burned.
    • And that source is wrong; I have three different sources, one which gives the time and details of how long the fire lasted. If ""Bridge to Beach Burns: Stranding 200 people". Hartford Courant. 17 June 1996. Retrieved 24 January 2014." is not viewable to you, the New York times archive link says "June 30, 1996 ...
    • PAUL OLIVA was relaxing ... two Sundays ago when he noticed a billowing column of black smoke rising above the trees..." - I'll get to the other issues in short order though. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 18:31, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

A few issues, so I'll place this on hold for a week. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:11, 5 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Okay, I did the fixes needed and cleaned up some other minor things. But it looks like I have some work to fix on other pages with the CAS not having a page. But I am neither a member or close to them. But one thing at a time, right! Thanks for pointing out the issues, I'll try to be on as much as I can to fix anything else. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 22:11, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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