Talk:Pilot (Desperate Housewives)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ktlynch (talk) 23:56, 9 February 2011 (UTC)

This article is relatively well-written and formatted. What information it does contain is correct and neutral. However, I would re-iterate the earlier critique which mentioned the overlinking of actresses' names. One way to avoid this might be to have some sort of "higher level" summary of the plot in the lead, and that section itself. So instead of listing all their affairs, say something like: "As the housewives come to terms with the suicide of Alice, an outwardly successful neighbour, their own private lives are explored in greater detail, for example, many are unfaithful or unhappy in their marriages."

While what is here is acceptable, the article relies on monotonous factoids to fill it out, such as the long boring list of previous films the sets had been used in. Besides this, there is little information about the production.

Secondly, the key part of this episode is the reception. It was made as a pilot to judge reaction to the concept. The producers' expectations before the broadcast and the critical and viewing reception need to be given in greater length. Finally, how did they decide to continue the series? Related point :There are far too many Desperate Housewives articles. Not every character and episode is notable. --Ktlynch (talk) 17:07, 12 February 2011 (UTC)

I found your comments insightful and helpful and they drew attention to issues in the article I didn't even consider. I believe I fixed the overlinking, as I've removed specific character affairs from the lead; the main actors' names are only linked in the plot summary section. After some consideration, I agree with your stance on the information regarding the sets. The list in which productions they have appeared in is tedious, extraneous, and detracts from the article as a whole. It is also covered in great detail in both the Colonial Street and Wisteria Lane articles. I've condensed the information regarding the sets in this article to a few sentences and added much more interesting and relevant commentary from the set designer. I have also expanded the critical reception section and included more information about how ABC executives handled the pilot as well as more casting details. One question I have is what you meant by "how did they decided to continue the series?" I looked at other articles about television pilots with at least a good-article status to see if I could see what you meant and I couldn't. I would love to make the change and add more necessary information, but I'm unclear as to what you meant. Thanks for the help! Akcvtt (talk) 00:48, 14 February 2011 (UTC)