Talk:Pierre-sur-Haute military radio station/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 17:44, 9 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this review. I'm excited to be put on a French military watchlist. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 17:44, 9 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

There's some material in the lede (the mountain details and the ski resort) that isn't in the main text. I would add that to the infrastructure section, and remove the ski resort sentence from the lede.
- Removed, since I couldn't find sources. Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'd rephrase the sentence as In April 2013, the French interior intelligence agency DCRI pressured the president of Wikimedia France into deleting the French-language Wikipedia article about the station.
- Much better, done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The next sentence could also use some rephrasing, perhaps something like As a result of the controversy, the article temporarily became the most read page on the French Wikipedia, which was noted as an example of the Streisand effect.
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Add "station" or "relay station" after semaphore telegraph
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I would say "circa-1910s" for the postcard date - there's no evidence that it's specifically 1913, though it's pretty obviously from the 1910s or early 1920s.
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Might be nice to specify in which cardinal direction the main base is located.
- Not sure if I can find a source for this. Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The sentence reading Military staff... is a bit confusing. Do tracked vehicles not use the road?
- Removed. Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'd move the line about the number of personnel to the paragraph about the staff buildings.
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The sentence In April 2013... attracted attention from the French interior intelligence agency DCRI. isn't really accurate. The agency was clearly aware of the article before then, particularly since they attempted to have it deleted in March. I would recommend rewriting the first few sentences here to clarify the order of events.
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add {{clear}} so that the image doesn't squeeze the references
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Use {{Portal bar}} or similar - the current stack leaves a lot of whitespace
- Done Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add alt text to images
- I am very bad with alt text... I've promoted GAs without them, not sure if it's required. Skyshifter ^talk 22:50, 18 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  - It's not required for GA review, but I strongly recommend it. It's the biggest step that any individual editor can make to make Wikipedia accessible. I've added it for you. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 01:05, 19 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Skyshifter: Placing on hold since you haven't replied here yet. Please try to make the needed changes within 1 week. Thanks, Pi.1415926535 (talk) 21:19, 16 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Will check soon. Skyshifter ^talk 21:45, 16 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: