Talk:Phyllis M. Ryan

2014 class review

Under the 'Dump the Duke' campaign heading, you make the following statement: "Their propaganda sought to expose what they saw as contradictions..." The word 'propaganda' has connotations that could effect the perceived bias of the author. Could this term be swapped out for something else? Ceaseandexist (talk) 17:19, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

You have a section called "Organizations where Milgroom worked (alphabetical)". However, you refer to her as 'Ryan' throughout most of the article. Perhaps replace this title with her full name, or change the rest of the name references throughout the article for consistency. Ceaseandexist (talk) 17:22, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

Excellent sources on this! You've got the finding aid, several newspaper articles, and a dissertation, which is a really nice range. You've got a few formatting issues with the references, mainly that you don't need to repeat a reference, and you could also provide a little more information about the dissertation; Wikipedia has some formatting help for theses here. I cleaned up your cite to the finding aid a little -- the actual date the finding aid was written was October 2003 (this is listed on the finding aid itself, although in small print.) Also, take a look at your reference number 1, and note how I gave the in-text ref a name. After that, I can use <ref name="findingaid"/> for the reference, instead of having to type the whole thing out again, and it collapses the reflist into a more readable form (see the superscript a, b in reference number 1.) You could also add an infobox, and add some categories at the bottom of the page, but I think cleaning up the references a little would be the more pressing part. Really nice research! I think you just need a few tweaks on the formatting end. AmandaRR123 (talk) 19:30, 28 October 2014 (UTC)