Talk:Phillip Davey/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 13:08, 4 July 2017 (UTC)

Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:08, 4 July 2017 (UTC)

• Lead and infobox;
  • After being accidentally wounded, gassed and promoted to the rank of lance corporal, he was awarded the Military Medal in January 1918 for bravery in the field.; This entire sentence reads vague, it is something this he was promoted and awarded the medal for being wounded and gassed. Please rephrase
  • he single-handedly killed an eight-man German machine gun crew -> he killed an eight-man German machine gun crew alone; or something similar, I feel that "single-handedly killed" doesn't comply with the NPOV
  • Please consider splitting the lead into two for improving the flow and readability
• Section 1; all good
• Section 2;
  • 4:30 am; please add {{nbsp}} per MOS:TIME
  • in October he was gassed; gassed where? during which battle?
• Section 3; all good
• 65% confidence, violation possible. But I understand that this is due to the citation quote of the medal.

Very well written. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 10:23, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

Thanks Krishna. I believe I have addressed all your comments. The earwig result is from the quotes. See what you think? Regards, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:43, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 14:09, 23 July 2017 (UTC)