Talk:Philip Slier/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:07, 14 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Not really convinced you need to link Dutch or Jewish here.

Unlinked.

• "as an onderduiker" I think you need to translate this rather than make us click away to see what that means.

Explained.

• "shifted places" odd way of putting it, do you mean "he moved around"?

He frequently changed his lodgings. I have used "moved to different hiding locations" instead.

• "to a couple of" loose, was it two?

I have changed it to "to two". Wouldn't "to two" sound a little off though? — The Most Comfortable Chair 17:55, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

• "at the Sobibor extermination camp just" probably worth noting this was in Poland.

Noted.

• "discovered by a foreman over" is the profession important here without the context?

Good point. Removed.

• "three story" hyphenate.

Done.

• "They succeeded and..." don't think you need this, merge the subsequent portion with the previous sentence.

Merged.

• You have "labourer" but "labor camp". ENGVAR?

Changed to "labour".

• "German Schutzstaffel SS prisoner" italics consistency please. And full stop on this caption.

Done.

• "resistance" is there a good link for this?

Yes, Resistance during World War II.

• "punishment barrack" what is that?

They were similar to prison cells — Auschwitz concentration camp#Life for the inmates has images. I have linked it to Barracks.

• "There were 2,020 prisoners shipped to Sobibor on his train" merge that 2020 into the previous sentence.

Merged.

• "hours.[14][19][19]" repeated ref.

Removed.

• "He found 86 letters, a postcard, and a telegram" you've said these numbers already.

Removed.

• "p. 30, 31." -> "pp. 30, 31"

Done.

• Same for p. 11, 25.

Done.

Very sad reading. But a decent article and not much to address here, so on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:54, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

It is very sad indeed. Thank you for your fine review The Rambling Man. I believe I have addressed all your points. Best. — The Most Comfortable Chair 17:55, 16 March 2021 (UTC)

Okay, I've re-read and am satisfied this is at GA level now. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 09:24, 17 March 2021 (UTC)