Talk:Phil Hartman/GA1

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Very nice article. Only a few nitpicky comments:

Maybe give a date for the image used in the infobox.
"1979 – 1998" in the infobox shouldn't have spaces.
West Coast is a disambig page.
Perhaps use {{sic}} in the SNL quote?
He made roughly $50,000 per episode - specify currency; I'm assuming US$.
Brynn Hartman visited the Italian restaurant Buca di Beppo - LA is only mentioned in the next sentence; perhaps move it up to here so one doesn't assume he's in Belgium or New Zealand or even Italy itself.
He threatened to leave her if she started using drugs again - vague about the "before". Just give a brief explanation of her previous experience with drugs as it's not mentioned for the uninitiated reader.
Brynn drove to the home of her friend Ron Douglas and confessed to the murder, although he initially did not believe her - "although" means "even though", which doesn't really fit here. Just "though" would make more sense.
raising the Hartman's children - plural "Hartmans' ".
The total amount of Hartman's estate was estimated at $1.23 million - the "total value"? And, again, specify currency.

All of these are fairly pedantic and minor, so I trust that you'll take care of these (it shouldn't take long) and I'll promote the article. Well done :) —97198 (talk) 12:19, 14 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I'll clear these details up, thanks very much for the review! Gran² 17:42, 14 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]