Talk:Personal fable

Rewrite

Rewrote the article and cited everything.
Removed opinionated material/speculation.
Removed the "dangers" stuff. Elkind thought this was relevant, but the data shows otherwise: teenagers believe they are just as vulnerable to common teenage pitfalls as middle-aged adults do.
- Beyth-Marom, R., Austin, L., Fischoff, B., Palmgren, C., & Jacobs-Quadrel, M. (1993). Perceived consequences of risky behaviors: Adolescents and adults. Developmental Psychology, 29, 549-563.

Lemme know if there are any issues. As always, be bold in editing; however, remember to make sure whatever you add/change is verifiable. Cheers. --slakr 02:29, 17 August 2007 (UTC)[reply]

-> I wrote the original. The rewrite looks a lot better, I just pieced together a definition from memory really. My idea was just to get this article on wikipedia, I was kind of surprised no one had added it yet. -Dj Domino

General Comments

This article needs improvement on several aspects.

1. Citation

There are quite a few statements that contain subjective judgements that are not cited. It makes the validity and reliability of those statements questionable. For example, "there has been no supporting evidence to suggest that adolescent egocentrism follows any age related pattern"(from section 1.1);"Adolescence was once believed to be a time of stress and turmoil" (from section 4); "Research has shown the personal fable to have an impact on identity development specifically"(from section 7) - this is an important research finding, but it is unclear who conducted the research and when it happened.

2. Structure

The article is a little bit about everything. However, I fail to see any logical connection between each section. All information seem to be unrelated to each other, and the sections are arranged randomly. For instant, readers might ask why "Gender difference" can't be merged into "Identity development;" and why there are two separate sections about identity while they are not even put together?

3. Presentation

Some arguments are quite confusing. For example, in section 3, the author seems to intend to introduce controversial findings about the differences of egocentrism level between genders. But there are too many entries/studies mentioned and it is unclear what contrasts are derived from which studies. The first sentence seems to be the key sentence of the whole paragraph, not until I read the third line I realized that it was only one side of the arguments. It would be better if the author use one or sentences to introduce the controversies.

merge with "adolescent egocentrism"

these two articles are extrememly similar, i don't see why this is necessary to be separate as they cover the same information Bigwiggy (talk) 22:14, 11 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]