Talk:Pershing Square Building/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:43, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
Comments
- " Grand Union Hotel.[3] Construction..." just a solitary ref in the lead, probably could be removed as long as the material is noted and referenced in the main body.
- Removed.
- " in 2010. In 2016" vaguely clunky.
- Fixed.
- "the Dual Contracts was" were?
- Fixed.
- " cost $3.5 million, then a very high sum.[" consider inflation so we don't need "then a very high sum". And consider inflation on the other contemporaneous values.
- Fixed.
- "The 25-story building's site. and " rogue period.
- Fixed.
- " investor Henry Mandel[a] offered " awkward red link/note combo somewhat detracts from the fine prose.
- Removed the red link. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
- "accepted.[23]<[24]" rogue <.
- Fixed.
- "Pershing Square Building Corp. " with or without period? Be consistent.
- I went with spelling out the name fully. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
- Continental Can Building could be a reasonable redirect to create since you have it in bold.
- Done.
- "The current owner..." -> "As of 2020[update] the owner is..."
- Done.
- "110 East 42nd Street" has been linked a couple of times already before you get to the third link in the Description section.
- I removed this duplicate link. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
- "peace.[47][35]" while you're editing, could you order these?
- Done.
- Could link Vanderbilt Avenue (in the caption).
- Done.
- " is a 24-story office " vs "who took up the 24th and 25th floors"?
- Fixed. It is 25 stories but the 25th story is not a full-lot penthouse. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
- Check consistency in refs, e.g. ref 37 has a URL and a publication date but no accessdate, unlike the others.
- I have fixed these. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
The article is excellent and it's hard to find fault. It's certainly GA quality but could we just address these issues before I promote? Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:56, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Thanks for the comments. I have fixed them all. epicgenius (talk) 15:37, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
- Good work, definitely happy with that so promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:15, 1 April 2020 (UTC)