Talk:Perfect Places/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:59, 2 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Release year in brackets for "Green Light"
"Perfect Places" is described → past tense
that blends booming bass, glimmering synths and drum machine beats → you don't need all these adjectives for the lead. Just resume yourself to: "that blends bass, synths and drum machine beats"
wondering where her perfect places are → you don't need to put "perfect places" in italics here
It has been received with acclaim → replace "It" with "The track" for clarification on what you mean here
who also directed her lead single → who also filmed the visual for the album's lead single
premiered through Lorde's → replace "through" with "on"
various shots alone in the beach → various shots alone at the beach
You need a short sentence about the track's chart performance at the end of the second paragraph: "Commercially, the song was moderatley successful, reaching the top 100 of the charts in several countries"

Infobox

Flawless ;)

Background and release

Lorde stated that the song → replace "the song" with "it" to avoid repetation
She elaborates by saying that both her and → She further said that both her and
both her and Antonoff → both her and Jack Antonoff
What do you mean by "how much there was to the song"?
Lorde's breakthrough came one day when she thought of deleting the "entire prechorus" → Searching for a solution, Lorde thought of deleting its pre-chorus
As the pair was rallying around a hook → As the pair was working on a hook
The main purpose for this would be them → They proceeded in
She sang into a microphone, next to a mixing board → This is irrelevant and can be removed
In the recording, she took one take, then another, modulating her performance as she went. In order to change the sound, Lorde stood back several feet to yell at the microphone, then got close to murmur. → During the recording, Lorde sang multiple takes and changed the sound by both distancing herself and getting closer to the microhpone in different parts.
Her takes were layered → In post-production, her takes were layered
Kate Bush inspired the harmony at the second half of the song. → The work of English singer Kate Bush served as an inspiration for a harmony at the second half of the song
The lyric "Now I can't stand to be alone" was originally "Now I don't know which way to go" but scrapped it as they felt "wishy-washy" → The lyric "Now I can't stand to be alone" was changed into "Now I don't know which way to go" as the pair felt it was "wishy-washy"
the heat led to writing the song → the heat led to her writing the song
release date, Lorde wrote a post about what inspired her to write "Perfect Places". Riding around → release date, Lorde revealed that riding around
to her home of New Zealand in winter for a week at a time to party with her friends further → to her residence (does she live there?) in New Zealand further... (other infos here are irrelevant)
I removed further irrelevant info here by myself

Composition and lyrical interpretation

Unlink "Jack Antonoff" and only mention his last name
with production also handled → with production mainly handled
Link "bass", "synths" and "drum machine"
of Sarah Grant of Rolling Stone → remove the first "of"
Link "R&B"
Spin noted how the song's → remove "song's" with "track's" (repatation of words)
Link "beats per minute"
vocal range between the notes → vocals ranging between the notes of
The lyric annotation paragraph was filled with more issues and irrelevant info, so I decided to edit it by myself ;)
Change the "lyrical interpretation" part from the title to "lyrics", as she said what the lyrics were abour rather than a critic interpreting them

Critical reception

comparing the song to "Team" → comparing the song to her 2013 single "Team"
Jenn Pelly of Pitchfork gave it the title of → Jenn Pelly of Pitchfork awarded it
She states that → She stated that
Pelly called Lorde → Pelly further called Lorde
Unlink "Spin" as already mentioned before
they threaten to "blow the speakers" → they threaten to 'blow the speakers'
imperfectness of "Perfect Places" → imperfectness of 'Perfect Places'
"young and ashamed" → 'young and ashamed'
for the track was a 7.4 → for the track was 7.4/10.
"brand new" which already sounds → "brand new" which sounded
Adriane Pontecorvo called a "good end-of- → Adriane Pontecorvo called the track a "good end-of-
In all, he called it → Concluding, he called it
and that compared to "Hey Jude"'s (1968) chorus, the chorus here "actually slaps." → and felt the chrous "actually slaps" in comparance with the refrain of the Beatles' "Hey Jude" (1968).
ranked the song at → anked the song at number
Lyndsey McKenna compared the song → Lyndsey McKenna from the organization compared the track (to avoid repetation)
She also said the song feels when you steal the aux cord where → She further stated that (other info is not important here)
the chorus to "Blank Space" → the chorus to Tayor Swift's "Blank Space"
but commending the track → change "the track" to "the recording"

Live performances

Unlink "Melodrama"
She has also performed the song → She had also sang "Perfect Places"

Music video

I decided to edit the "Background" section by myself
making her across a field of tall grass → do you mean she walks into the field?
collection outfit in a sandy beach → collection outfit on a sandy beach
her walking at dusk the beach → her walking the beach at dusk
stands in a hidden area → what do you mean by "hidden area"?
across the coastline then nearly → across the coastline, followed by her nearly submerging
The next scene shows Lorde in alone in a restaurant filled → remove the first "in"
Lorde is then shown alone in a boat → Lorde is subsequently shown alone in a boat
with a rifle then hits a lightbulb → with a rifle and hits a lightbulb
The rest of the video features several of the aforementioned scenes ending with → Cotinuing in a similar way, the video ends with

Track listing

Flawless ;)

Credits and personnel

Flawless ;)

Charts

Flawless ;)

Release history

You should create a "Release history" section where you reference the release date of the song. As for now, the release infos are unsourced and questionable...

Other stuff

Copy-violation

45.9% is slightly too much! Please revise this!

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Outcome

This article does require a bit of work, but I believe you can handle this. I put this On hold for 7 days to allow your edits... Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:26, 2 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

After some trouble editing, I think I have fixed everything on here. Thank you, once again. I noticed that you asked if I could take a look at some of your GANs and I while I would be happy to land a hand, I have no idea how to administer that. It seems that my editing and grammar are very weak from the couple of articles that I have worked on. De88 (talk) 03:17, 3 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@De88: No problem! Passing this though! Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:13, 3 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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