Talk:Perfect Illusion/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:23, 23 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

and ultimately is a commentary → and is ultimately a commentary
Underwood typewriter and after numerous → a semicolon would help this flow better → Underwood typewriter; after numerous
permutations the composers → comma before "the composers"
boyfriend Taylor Kinney, was refuted by the singer → overfluous comma here
The song's release was preceded → state "the recording's" here for alternation
reviews for "Perfect Illusion" with many of them → comma before "with many"
stating "Gaga fuses her neo-folkie Lilith-hippie mode with her disco roots in this Mark Ronson-produced dance-floor confession". → this is overly detailed for the lead and can be thus removed
reached number 15 on the US Billboard Hot 100 as well as entered → comma before "as well"
subordinate charts also → remove "also" here
top-ten → top 10
Slovak Republic → state simply Slovakia here
as well as a number of television → as well as made a number of television

Infobox

flawless ;)

Background and development

and recording processes → and recording process
Buro247.com → omit the ".com" part

Writing and recording

The song began as a demo called → The song fruited from a demo called
the US → write out please
The song's arrangement → State "The track's" here to alternate
was done by Ronson who played → was handled by Ronson, who played
and Parker added drums → alongside Parker adding drums
"She loves just sitting at a piano and barking orders at a drummer and she has an incredible voice," he confessed, and then went on to clarify → Concerning this, he confessed that "she...", further clarifiying
and then go → and then go on
recalled: "She's never → : to ,
Lyrics were developed → They were developed
adding: "We stripped everything away → : to ,
Shangri-La Studios which BloodPop → comma before "which"

Music and lyrical interpretation

building chord sequence, which he felt leads → building chord sequence that he felt leads (due to word repetition)
autotune → Auto-Tune
Lewis Corner from Digital Spy gave a breakdown of the song → what is this supposed to mean?
Add release year in brackets to "Just Dance" and "Poker Face"
Same for Born This Way
with the verse and the refrain being connected → due to the verse and the refrain being connected
and Gaga's vocals span → with Gaga's vocals spanning
Lyrically, "Perfect Illusion" is about the → Lyrically, "Perfect Illusion" delves on the (for better reading)
hence the song name → hence the song's name
an interview to iHeartMedia → an interview with iHeartMedia
as "about modern ecstasy... → as being "about modern ecstasy [...]
that the lyrics ultimately was a → that the lyrics ultimately were a
was about their relationship. She felt that the lyrics spoke → was about their relationship, further believing that they spoke
The singer added: "I love Taylor → : to ,
against [him]... [I]t's a → ... to [...]

Release and artwork

Gaga confirmed the release date → Following this, the singer confirmed the release date
Another photo was revealed → use "unveiled" here for alternation
still picture → shot
called the artwork as "iconic" → called the cover "iconic"
comparing Gaga to that of Canadian singer-songwriter Alice Glass → remove "that of"
for the Bustle quote, please fix ... to [...]
16 second → 16-second
and the same chord beats → with the same chord beats
along side host → alongside host
in the world... It feels like → ... to [...]

Critical reception

four out of five stars, saying that the song "delights me → use "track" here for alternation
compared the verses to those by singer → compared the verses to work by singer
Unlink "Artpop" here
called the song "stomping" and said that Gaga was "blubbering → alternate here with "the singer"
In ranking Lady Gaga's lead singles → use "the singer's" here for alternation
Release year of "Applause" in brackets
ranked it number twenty-eight → ranked it number 28
stating "Gaga fuses → comma after "stating"

Chart performance

million first-week US streams → million first-week streams in the United States
iHeartMedia owned → iHeartMedia-owned
released dated September 24, 2016 → released for the week ending September 24, 2016
becoming her second lowest peaking → becoming her second-lowest peaking
Other debuts atop the charts happened in Finland → change "happened" to "occurred"
attained top-ten → attained top 10
top-five → top five
Link "Italian Singles Chart"

Music video

According to Page Six, the music video was filmed → Use "the visual" here for alternation
recording studio with Gaga and Ronson, during conception of many → no comma + state "the singer" here for alternation
is an "energetic" track they → comma before "they"
That also gave them the idea to use Ronson, Parker → It also inspired them to use Ronson, Parker (alternation)
all playing cameos in the clip → for cameo appearances in the clip
It starts with Gaga singing → It starts with her singing (alternation)
which made up majority → add "the" before "majority"

Reception and analysis

dance nature of the clip and noted that Gaga had posted → alternate with "the singer" here
Carey O'Donnell from Papermag felt that the video → alternate with "the visual" here please
She added that its a "different direction → "its" to "it's"
one a clear idea regarding what to expect from the video → alternate with "clip" here
realness to it... The → ... to [...]
like her previous albums, however he → , to ;
I've edited the image's description here by myself

Live performances and media usages

and silver shorts and only with a microphone, → and sliver shorts, alongside a microphone

Charts

flawless ;)
Are there any year-end charts?

Certifications

flawless ;)

Release history

Unlink formats and labels

Other stuff

Copy-violation

59.9% is WAY too much! Please look for the first 5 sources at the top of the list and reduce the content from them in the article's body

Images and others

Images perfectly illustrate the article
By the way, cool idea with the eye-rolling clip

Links

No problem here!

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
1 dead link from iTunes! Please fix!

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! You've done a brilliant job with this , Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:45, 25 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Cartoon network freak: thanks for the detailed review. I have pruned down quite a bit of the prose and removed the COPYVIO a lot. Except for the V magazine quote which as I explained will pass COPYVIO for its attestation. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 11:12, 26 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - Gladly passing! It's okay with the COPYVIO thing now ;) Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:43, 26 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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