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Reviewer: Albacore (talk · contribs) 03:26, 1 April 2012 (UTC) Review:
- First, Per Manum (The X-Files) should redirect to this page
- It was written by Frank Spotnitz and series creator Chris Carter, and directed by Kim Manners. The episode helps to explore the series' overarching mythology. Combine the two sentences; something like: "Written by Frank Spotnitz and series creator Chris Carter, and directed by Kim Manners, the episode helps to explore the series' overarching mythology."
- Delink the names of the actors in the lead since they're linked in the "plot" section.
- FBI special agents John Doggett (Robert Patrick) and Dana Scully (Gillian Anderson) meet Duffy Haskell why not mention who plays Haskell?
- Done.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:58, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- overhearing a pregnant woman, Mrs Hendershot why not mention who plays Hendershot since she seems important to the plot?
- Done.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:58, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- believing that Rohrer is a CIA agent. you link FBI so why not CIA?
- Done.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:58, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- Delink Scully from the infobox
- Done.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:58, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- Duffy Haskel in this episode, would return would return->> returned
- Done.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:58, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- They are driven away, but Hendershot enters labour. Unclear who "they" are hear: the marines or the group
- Perhaps link "In vitro fertilisation" , and do italicize "in vitro"
- Done.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:58, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- In the Broadcast and reception section you have three "the episode"s in a row to begin sentences in the first paragraph; a reword would be nice.
- Done, see below--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:53, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- Ref 12, the date should be formatted as the other dates are
- Done, these two were my fault...--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:53, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- Are there any more reviews you could add or find?
- I added a (pretty scathing) review from Cinefantastique.--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:02, 2 April 2012 (UTC)
- If you could respond to each comment individually that would be great. I'll re-look the article when these are addressed. Albacore (talk) 03:26, 1 April 2012 (UTC)
- Reread and passed. Albacore (talk) 22:05, 2 April 2012 (UTC)