Talk:Pepsiman (video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:33, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

How funny, I was thinking of bringing this up to GA myself a few months ago (after I watched ProtonJon's livestream of it). Now it's been nominated, I'll be happy to review it. JAGUAR 21:33, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"is an action video game developed by KID, and released on March 4, 1999, in Japan for the PlayStation" - personal preference, but I would rephrase this to is an action video game developed and published by KID, for the PlayStation on March 4, 1999 in Japan or something similar. Feel free to ignore
"and has the player avoiding obstacles by running" - and focuses the player on avoiding might sound better
"which the future visual novel writer Kotaro Uchikoshi was the 3D modeler for" - this doesn't make sense
"While an American publisher did look into acquiring the rights to publish the game in America" - United States
"while a reviewer at Destructoid" - reviewer of
"In some stages, Pepsiman gets a steel drum over his head" - 'gets' sounds a bit wrong. How about In some stages, Pepsiman's head becomes stuck inside a steel drum
"which led to the decision to use the video scenes of the American man drinking Pepsi, as they did not cost much to make" - American men don't cost much to make, or video scenes?
"while an American publisher was looking into acquiring the rights to publish the game in America" - again, I'd use the United States here as America itself is discouraged
"A writer for IGN" - why not "a reviewer"?

On hold

This is a neat and compact little article. The references all check out. Once all of the minor prose issues are addressed, then this should have no problem passing. JAGUAR 21:44, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Thank you for the review! I think I have fixed everything.--IDV^talk 21:58, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, that was quick! OK, this looks good to go.

JAGUAR 22:02, 16 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]