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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:49, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

After your amazing response to my last review, I will take this article on! --K. Peake 06:49, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Wooo thank you! Giacobbe talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • List the producers under their full names in the infobox since this is not a track listing  Done
  • "on 22 August 2019 through" → "on 22 August 2019, through"  Done
  • Wikilink lead single instead  Done
  • Target heavy rock to Hard rock  Done
  • Target chords to Chord (music)  Done
  • "and sonic departure from" → "and the sonic departure from the band's third studio album,"  Done
  • "In the band's native" → "In the 1975's native"  Done
  • UK Singles chart → UK Singles Chart  Done
  • Shouldn't the above chart be mentioned before the rock & metal one since it is the UK's main chart?  Done
  • "in Scotland, and" → "in Scotland and"  Done
  • "and received comparisons to" → "and was compared to"  Done

Background

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  • Retitle to Background and recording  Done
  • "21 February 2020 and later for" → "21 February and later for" to avoid writing the same year twice in one sentence  Done
  • "Minor Threat, and" → "Minor Threat and" because the article is written in British English  Done
  • "revealed its origin stemmed" → "revealed the song's origins stemmed"  Done
  • Target controversial ban to Abortion in Alabama  Done
  • "yelling obscenities" the source mentions them booing, so reword accordingly  Done
  • "at the band." → "at the 1975."  Done
  • Remove capitalisation for open carry  Done
  • "was furious, and wrote" → "was furious and wrote"  Done
  • Remove release year of "The 1975" from brackets since you have stated it earlier in that very sentence, plus none of the other songs of the title are mentioned  Done
  • [14] only shows the music video, which does not back up the song's release as a single; try this instead, which is already used in the comp section  Done

Composition

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  • Retitle to Composition and lyrics  Done
  • Sample looks good!
  • "two minutes and forty seconds" → "two minutes and 40 seconds" but the length is not sourced; add Tidal at the end of the sentence preferably  Done
  • "heavy rock instrumentation built upon" → "heavy rock instrumentation, built upon" with the target  Done
  • Target chords to Chord (music)  Done
  • "breakneck drums and "renegade" percussion" are not backed up by [23] and cannot be viewed since even [24]'s oldest archive does not load  Done
    musicOMH has a pseudo-adblock/paywall pop-up lower down on the page. It won't let you search until you clear it. I've removed the entire ref, though. Not sure why it was there. Giacobbe talk 13:46, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Death From Above, and" → "Death From Above and"  Done
  • "that its use of" → "that the song's use of"  Done
  • "Queens of the Stone Age, and said" → "Queens of the Stone Age and saying"  Done
  • Target pop to Pop music  Done
  • Remove wikilink on Death From Above  Done
  • "His vocal delivery on" → "Healy's vocal delivery on"  Done
  • "with a screaming rallying call" → "with a screaming call" since the rallying part is unsourced  Done
  • "Healy condemns personal" → "Healy condemns both personal"  Done
  • The first letter of the quotes should be capitalised since it's a full line  Done
  • "are funny / But we" the source presents these as being part of the same line
  • "embraced the angst" → "embraces the angst"  Done
  • "was to: "[tell] listeners" → "is to "[tell] listeners"  Done

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception, as everything in the lead needs to be written out in the body so the commercial reception should be added here  Done
  • "received positive reviews from" → "was met with positive reviews from"  Done
  • "from the band's fanbase" → "from the 1975's fanbase"  Done
  • [24] is not needed since [30] is enough to back the fanbase info up  Done
  • "sounded like: "he's" → "sounds like "he's"  Done
  • Are you sure Euphoria is reliable per WP:SELFPUB?
  • "saw it as a radical departure from the band's" → "saw the former as a radical departure from the 1975's"  Done
  • "breaking a skateboard"." → "breaking a skateboard."" per MOS:QUOTE  Done
  • "debate to rest"." → "debate to rest.""  Done
  • "Cerys Kenneally of" → "Cerys Kenneally from" to avoid repetitiveness  Done
  • "Smith said it was:" → "Smith said it is,"  Done
  • "a revolution, man"." → "a revolution, man.""  Done
  • Create a third para for chart positions, as that is not enough to warrant its own section  Done

Music video

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  • Wikilink music video on the img text  Done
  • "designed the band's hair" → "designed the 1975's hair"  Done
  • "To make Healy look "toxic"," → "To make Healy look real and "a bit toxic","  Done
  • "used in the video, meant to" → "that are used in the video, with them being meant to"  Done
  • "the second is shown scanning the band's" → "while the second is shown scanning the band members"  Done
  • The small part for the cube is not backed up  Done
  • Target LED to LED display  Done
  • The lights are not described as flashing  Done
  • "yellow suits. Kirsten Sprunch" → "yellow suits; Kirsten Sprunch"  Done
  • "Chris DeVille of Stereogum compared Healy's" → "DeVille compared Healy's"  Done
  • "a sentiment shared by" → "with the latter sentiment being shared by"  Done
  • "Koltan Greenwood of the" → "Koltan Greenwood of"  Done
  • "Moreland of Pitchfork compared Healy's" → "Moreland compared Healy's"  Done
  • "saying the video" → saying the visual"  Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Good

Charts

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References

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  • Copyvio score may look too high at 47.1%, but this is mostly due to the titles listed in the article so ignore it
  • Top job with the archives!
It appears so, as there are no refs directly from YouTube now you have used the NPR citation for the single release. --K. Peake 14:59, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • WP:OVERLINK of Pitchfork on ref 17  Done
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 18  Done
  • Remove wikilink on Pitchfork for ref 21 and fix MOS:QWQ issues  Done
  • Remove or replace ref 24 since the original URL does not work and even the oldest archive is not accessible  Done
  • WP:OVERLINK of NME on ref 26  Done
  • IHeartRadio → iHeartRadio on refs 28 and 31  Done
  • Cite Euphoria as publisher instead for ref 33
Thank you for explaining that, I was unsure whether it should be italicised or not initially! --K. Peake 14:59, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  • (CA)Giacobbe You missed the comma, but that is very minor so I added it for you. ✓ Pass now and I did notice in the background section that you have bared in mind my comments for your previous GAN when editing this article; I tip my hat to you for this! --K. Peake 15:05, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Kyle Peake: Whoops, thank you for fixing that. Awesome! Another great review. In regards to the previous GAN, I certainly did utilize the advice from your comments there in this article. I always strive to grow as an editor by incorporating tips, advice, and experience from every reviewer. It helps not only myself, but Wikipedia as a whole to have strong, well-written articles! Cheers! Giacobbe talk 15:11, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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