Talk:Pennsylvania Route 463/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: --P C B 04:54, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
I have a couple issues with the prose, as listed below. You need non-breaking spaces for all the routes too I think.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
The lead could be expanded a little.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
It's not problem, but the pictures are strikingly similar. :)
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
I will put the article on hold for a couple of prose fixes.

Lead:

It needs to be expanded a little more on the Route description.
- Added some details on road names. It only needs to be a summary so any additional information is unnecessary. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"It runs through suburban areas..." Rather vague.
- Indicated where the suburban areas are. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Route description:

Your descriptions of land uses are a little vague. (Residences, Businesses, Commercial, Farms...)
- This is the best way to describe the surroudings of the road. There is no need to indicate what the specific business the road passes is of what the farm grows. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"...wooded areas of homes." Wood homes? People living in trees?
- Clarified. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
What more business? How can a route pass through business?
- Fixed. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
How can something cross a proposed parkway?
- The road crosses the parkway that is under construction, tweaked. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"The road intersects Keith Valley Road and passes between Samuel Carpenter Park and homes to the northeast and business parks to the southwest." A little rambling here.
- Fixed. Dough 48 72 05:22, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I see a repeating pattern that should be changed. "...passes BLAH road, with BLAH to the DIRECTION and BLAH to the OTHERDIRECTION." Perhaps you could adjust some of these sentences. To tell you the truth, all these terrain descriptions are a little boring.
- Cut down on some of the terrain descriptions. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

History:

Perhaps reword some of the sentences that say "IN/BY YEAR, BLAH happened."
- Changed some sentences. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Too many abbreviations! All this rerouting thing is a little confusing. Adding more normal language words would help. There are too many numbers and abbreviations.
- The route abbreviations are defined earlier in the article and are therefore valid here. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Major intersections:

Is it necesssary to note that the termini exist? I think it's a little obvious. --P C B 05:06, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed. Dough 48 72 05:21, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Good job. I think I am ready to pass the article. Congratulations on your 101st GA. --P C B 05:29, 10 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]