Talk:Penn & Teller's Smoke and Mirrors/GA1

GA Review

Passed. NegativeMP1 18:34, 14 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 20:05, 7 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this, though do note it'll probably take just a short while since I plan on reviewing CaptainSparklez first. I should get that one and this one done shortly, however. NegativeMP1 20:05, 7 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

No rush. :) IceWelder [✉] 20:48, 7 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

General criteria

All cases that could warrant a quickfail at WP:GAFAIL are not present in this article. There are no signs of copyright violations, edit warring, or cleanup banners and tags. Moving on to the review.

Review

Lead

No issues here.

Gameplay

"Using the hidden "owner menu", the owner can set up certain minigames to play practical jokes on a sucker" - For consistency with the rest of the article, change "on a sucker" to "on the sucker".
In the Desert Bus section, there should probably be a bit more elaboration or explanation on the rest stops. Using the GameSetWatch source as a basis, maybe add a sentence after "one ride takes eight hours in real-time." that is something on the lines of "The player will occasionally reach bus stops on their trip, but no other passengers will get on."
Consider adding alt text to the Desert Bus screenshot.

Development

Same as lead, no issues here.

Reception

Again, no issues here.

Legacy

The Remakes section should probably be renamed to "Remakes of Desert Bus"
It is fairly obvious, but it should probably be clarified that the Atari and Intellivision versions were homebrew as well.

Final comments

Overall this article is pretty solid, no major issues but there are a few small things that could be tweaked. Putting this on hold, also sorry for the six day wait, I was working on other articles and some irl stuff. NegativeMP1 22:29, 13 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Nevermind the GA review tool broke so I can't put it on hold. Hopefully you see this in your watchlist lol. NegativeMP1 22:31, 13 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, @NegativeMP1! I made some teeny-tiny alterations that should address your concerns. Regards, IceWelder [✉] 10:11, 14 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, this looks good now. Passing this article, good job.

NegativeMP1 18:34, 14 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.