Talk:Peacock (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sauloviegas (talk • message • contribs • count • logs • email) 02:37, 4 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

First look through

5 different disambiguation pages. Fix this

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Infobox

3:52 (Album version) -> 3:52. There is no need to add album version since a single version or radio edit wasn't released.

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Lead

"Peacock" is a song by American singer Katy Perry, from her second mainstream studio album, Teenage Dream (2010). -> "Peacock" is a song by American recording artist Katy Perry, taken from her third studio album, Teenage Dream (2010).

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Similar to what happened with another song of hers – "I Kissed a Girl" – she refused. -> Similar to what happened with another song of hers – "I Kissed a Girl" (2008) – she refused.

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1980's hit "Mickey" and Gwen Stefani's "Hollaback Girl" single. -> 1980's hit "Mickey" by Toni Basil, and Gwen Stefani's "Hollaback Girl" (2005).

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Nonetheless it performed well of music charts worldwide considering it was never released as a single. -> Re-write this.

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Background

for her second mainstream studio album, Teenage Dream -> for her third studio album, Teenage Dream

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'Look I've got a lot of jewels, but I really don't have the crown. I really don't have that full-blown presentation" -> "Look I've got a lot of jewels, but I really don't have the crown. I really don't have that full-blown presentation"

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made several more songs. Of these were "Firework" and "Peacock". -> made several more songs, including "Firework" and "Peacock".

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was against having the song be a track -> was against the inclusion of the song as a track

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Critical reception

You have included info about a cover version on this section. Since it is only one cover, it should be included on the Live performances section, that should be retitled to Live perfomances and cover versions. Example: Burning Up.

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Chart performance

""Peacock" achieved mediocre peaks on music charts worldwide, but performed exceptionally considering it was never released as a single and charted solely based on legally paid digital downloads." How can this be neutral? Remember, every Wikipedia article must have a neutral point of view. It would be better like this: "Despite not being released as a single, "Peacock" managed to enter on a few charts around the world." Also, don't include "solely based on legally paid digital downloads", since you are also talking about the Hot Dance Club Songs chart, which is based only on "the songs that are most popular in U.S. dance clubs".

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Tracklistings and formats

Re-title to "Track listing", since it was only released a part of the album through a promo CD.

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Album version does not go in here. Remove it.

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I'll put this on hold. Good work, by the way! :) - Sauloviegas (talk) 17:24, 4 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Non Reviewer comments:

Cover is fan-made, and Discog's is unreliable. Please remove all instances.

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MOS; Kesha not Ke$ha.

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Live performances; please remove red links, these are common words not needed to be linked.

I currently do not see any redlinks, but have unlinked bustier because that seems to be common.

aCharts is unreliable; Wikipedia:CHARTSCHART#Recommended_charts "Good and Featured class articles should not rely on unlicensed archives as convenience links, and should use official sites and licensed archives where possible." Replace with proper Billboard archives.

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Credits and Personnel section is required for GA status or the article fails criteria 3a.

~~::My CD is in my moms car right now, so I should have a c&p up by tomorrow Crystal Clear x3 07:10, 5 September 2011 (UTC)~~[reply]

done Crystal Clear x3 15:43, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

- (CK)Lakeshade - talk2me - 23:46, 4 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you both for your helpful comments :) Crystal Clear x3 08:03, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good job! I'll wait for you to put the credits and personnel section. - Sauloviegas (talk) 01:36, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Passing. - Sauloviegas (talk) 19:05, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]