Talk:Paul Loudon

Paul Loudon was nominated as a Sports and recreation good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (December 22, 2023, reviewed version). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated.

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GA Review

Unsuccessful. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 20:18, 22 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

This review is transcluded from Talk:Paul Loudon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 05:25, 26 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (No original research): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Notes

addes ice hockey execs and minnesota cat
added commons cat
don't see birthdate in ref 1
put playing position "end" in infobox
"winning All-American honors by Walter Camp." Dont see that in ref 3
"described by several newspapers as a "human battering ram" only one is cited
where did you get the playing spans for basketball and baseball on the infobox. Those dont seem to be correlated in the body. Those might be true based off ref 7. It also said he played freshman baseball in ref 7 so i think he had 4 years in baseball
"As a junior, Loudon was named team captain in both basketball and baseball" that ref seems to be talking about his senior year and it doesnt say he was named captain. He could have been captain earlier than that right?
"Barrett Award" that might be true but i dont see where the source has a name for it.
link artilleryman
link AHA to American Hockey Association (1926–1942) i also linked loudon at that article
"president of the Central Hockey League" already linked above and actually you can just use abbreviations since you already spelled that out above
"elected president of the American Hockey Association (AHA)" you can just say AHA
link millers on coaching section of infobox. Actually on second thought i dont see that in the body.
i think northwestern hospital might be this
where'd you get 1926 for millers in the infobox, don't see that in the sources
I don't see in the sources where it said he was a owner of the millers

That's all I think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 06:05, 26 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Closed with the nominator BeanieFan11's permission. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 20:18, 22 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I did a spot check of sources and did not find any more issues. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:02, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

GA comments

don't see birthdate in ref 1
- Not sure where I got that – removed.
put playing position "end" in infobox
- Added.
"winning All-American honors by Walter Camp." Dont see that in ref 3
- Found a ref mentioning it, although I'm not convinced it was true so I put that it was 'all-american according to one source'
"described by several newspapers as a "human battering ram" only one is cited
- Re-worded.
where did you get the playing spans for basketball and baseball on the infobox. Those dont seem to be correlated in the body. Those might be true based off ref 7. It also said he played freshman baseball in ref 7 so i think he had 4 years in baseball
"As a junior, Loudon was named team captain in both basketball and baseball" that ref seems to be talking about his senior year and it doesnt say he was named captain. He could have been captain earlier than that right?
"Barrett Award" that might be true but i dont see where the source has a name for it.
- Removed the name.
link artilleryman
- Done.
link AHA to American Hockey Association (1926–1942) i also linked loudon at that article
"president of the Central Hockey League" already linked above and actually you can just use abbreviations since you already spelled that out above
"elected president of the American Hockey Association (AHA)" you can just say AHA
link millers on coaching section of infobox. Actually on second thought i dont see that in the body.
- Removed Millers coaching – it looks like 'Fred Rocque' actually held the position per [1]
i think northwestern hospital might be this
- Linked.
where'd you get 1926 for millers in the infobox, don't see that in the sources
I don't see in the sources where it said he was a owner of the millers

BeanieFan11 (talk) 14:48, 31 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]