Talk:Paul Goodman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sahaib3005 (talk · contribs) 06:21, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think it passes. It is quite a good article. I’m not seeing any problems with the article. Sahaib3005 (talk) 06:21, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Citation needed tag to be addressed, would also like opinions on the tone (narrative). Kingsif (talk) 13:51, 7 August 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is reasonably well written
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is referenced with reliable sources. Though there isn’t much, most are from the same books (Mattson, Smith, Widmer, etc).
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It is broad, it covers his life, personal life, reception, etc
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It seems neutral, there is no peacock words. There may be a slight bias in favour towards him, because I’m not seeing much bad things.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
Looking through the history there is no edit wars
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
There isn’t much images, except for the one in the lead which is a fair use image
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
It seems to pass. I learned a lot about him from reading this wikipedia article. It links to a external video which is useful. It also has a good layout, and has notes, further reading and external links.

New reviewer needed

I've changed the status of this nomination to "second opinion" in the hopes that a new reviewer can be found that way, since the original reviewer withdrew after the premature passage was reverted. Even though they then came back and repassed it a few days later, the new review was done so quickly that it would be better if an experienced reviewer checked the article against the criteria (just a quick look finds issues with MOS:LEAD, a GA criterion, which should be fixed prior to passage). A full GA review is needed, starting from scratch. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:46, 16 August 2021 (UTC) [updated at 03:26, 16 August 2021 (UTC)][reply]

Femke, responding to second opinion

Hello Czar. I'll be picking up the GA review. I can understand that the previous reviewer passed without comment, as the article is in good shape. I can do some nitpicking with respect to criterion 1 and criterion 4. The level is English required to be able to understand this article is quite high, and I believe we could serve our readers better by using more everyday language (or, when impossible, linking to wiktionary). It may be an overbroad interpretation of criterion 1, so don't feel forced to change all of them.

outre?
how come two of his siblings are mentioned, but not the third?
- Alice and Percy are discussed later in the article, hence the introduction, whereas his brother Arnold is nary mentioned in any source czar 16:52, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
audited?
- academic audit
open bisexual is a phrase I'm not familiar with for describing bisexual and in an open relationship
It's not quite clear what relation the sentence (Goodman was deferred and rejected from the World War II draft.[8]) has to the previous sentence. If it's just some background about something happening before Partisan review removed him, you could put it in a different tense: "Goodman himself had been deferred and rejected from the World War II draft". Or is his rejection part of the advocacy in some manner?
- Is it not clear that giving his WWII draft status is related to the previous sentence's mention of his draft avoidance advocacy? Yes, it's background info and without the draft avoidance connection, it likely wouldn't warrant mention. czar 18:01, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
late-40s: no hyphen, not an adjective
his lack of wider recognition weathered his resolve -> should we say this in wikivoice? Do we know his inner thoughts?
- Goodman was known for his self-expression and this is sourced to his literary executor, the person most qualified to say that Goodman was discouraged by lack of wider recognition czar 16:52, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
rut?
lionized?
was not affected by their reaction -> again, this is inner thoughts, so should be attributed / weakened.
that today forms the basis of his legacy -> that forms the basis of his legacy (no need for today)
Goodman doesn't offer a single definition of human nature, and suggests that it needs no definition for others to that some activities are against it -> grammar
As the New Left was born with the Berkeley Free Speech Movement's proactively involved and democratic dialogue,[17] Goodman became known as its philosopher -> grammar?
link common-law marriage, rather than common law to help reader understand
tertium quid?
Goodman's strange celebrity was tied to his physical presence, not the charisma of his platform or gadfly personality. While his celebrity left public circulation as quickly as it came, his principles and outré proposals retained their stature as a vision of human potential -> should this be in wikivoice? I find it too celebratory to be said without explicit attribution. Why 'strange celebrity'?
Why split life and personal life?
- It's a common Wikipedia paradigm (cf. Noam Chomsky). The idea is that intricate family and personal details normally distracts from or does not fit in a section about a person's career. czar 18:01, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Spot-checked a couple of sources, and text-source integrity seems spotless. FemkeMilene (talk) 14:28, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Appreciate the review, @Femkemilene! I believe I've addressed the above either in comments or edits, where pertinent. czar 18:01, 11 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Femkemilene, just wanted to make sure you saw my reply—believe I've addressed the above czar 05:21, 18 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

sorry, I've been ill. Hope to get brains back soon. FemkeMilene (talk) 08:04, 18 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]