Talk:Patrick Sandoval/GA1
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Reviewer: Newtothisedit (talk · contribs) 01:06, 18 October 2022 (UTC)
I'll pick this up for review. I should begin leaving comments in the next week.--Newtothisedit (talk) 01:06, 18 October 2022 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- "where he was a standout athlete in football as a punter and baseball as a starting pitcher. He became a notable baseball prospect early in his amateur career, earning selections to multiple all-county and all-league teams" I'd combine these sentances in some way. Right now it is a little clunky and backwards maybe something along the lines of ""where he was a standout athlete in football as a punter and baseball as a starting pitcher, earning selections to multiple all-county and all league baseball teams"
- Fixed -- combined the two sentences into one. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
- "spent his first two brief seasons between the starting rotation and the bullpen" to "spent his first two brief seasons alternating between the starting rotation and the bullpen"
- Fixed. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
- wikilink to reliever
- Added. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
- I'd cut this sentence out of the lead "On July 24, 2021, Sandoval came within two outs of throwing a no-hitter at Target Field before giving up a double." almost getting a no hitter (especially when its not even 1 out away) is to trivial to be in the lead.
- Fair point. It's been removed Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
Early life
[edit]- "Sandoval attended Mission Viejo High School in Mission Viejo, California, where he played baseball and football as a punter." to "Sandoval attended Mission Viejo High School where he played baseball and football as a punter."
- Fixed. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
Professional career
[edit]- "striking out 42 in 39+1⁄3 innings" to "striking out 42 batters in 39+1⁄3 innings"
- Added. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
- "fourth-most on the Angels and second among Angels starters, only behind American League MVP Shohei Ohtani" specify it was the second most among pitchers/starting pitchers right now it's slightly confusing.
- I reworded it to "His 2.0 Wins Above Replacement (WAR) was fourth-most among all Angels players and second-most among Angels starting pitchers, only behind American League MVP Shohei Ohtani."
References and GA Criteria
[edit]- References are formatted well and spot checks are accurate.
- Article meets GA criteria
Good Article Criteria
[edit]- Article meets all good article criteria.
- Newtothisedit, I've implemented the changes above. Let me know if there are any other issues to resolve. Sewageboy (talk) 07:28, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
Looks good to me, I'll promote it. Good Job on the article --Newtothisedit (talk) 14:21, 21 October 2022 (UTC)