Talk:Patrick Bissell/GA2

GA Review

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I will be reviewing your article for GA and adding comments below. It looks like an interesting, well written article. There are a few things that I notice right away though.

• Per Overling and underlinking you should reduce the amount of wikilinks you have in the article, For examples, dates are not supposed to be autoformated. I have a script that will remove them, if you want me to run it.
• Per the above, American Ballet Theater is wikilinked throughout the article. The practice is to link it at first mention, say in the lead, and at the most, once more in the body of the article.
• Also, I noticed this quotation: Gelsey Kirkland alleged that Bissell's untimely death was "an unavoidable tragedy caused at least in part by the failure of the ballet world and American Ballet Theater in particular to acknowledge and deal openly with the drug problem"

Does he mean tragedy that was able to be avoided? Or does he mean that no matter what anyone did, the tragedy was unavoidable?

• You have done a very good job with your references. However, they all need to have publishers - there are a few that do not.

That is all I see for now! I will check the article more throughly. —Mattisse (Talk) 01:02, 16 November 2008 (UTC)

Thanks, Mattisse. Could you please run your script to remove unnecessary links? As regard to the Kirkland quote - I understood it to mean that the tragedy was unavoidable due to the inability of the ballet world and American Ballet Theater to deal with drug abuse. Have added publishers to refs - there's only one that doesn't have one, the David Earl website, because it is the official website of David Earl so I'm not sure what to add for the publisher as there isn't one. Thanks again,

--Cazo3788 (talk) 20:24, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

• I guess the publisher would be www.davidearl-pianist.net.

I ran the script. Technically, the dates should be in American format, unless there is a reason that you have not used that format. —Mattisse (Talk) 20:54, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

Thanks, Mattisse. I added the publisher. I'm not American so I didn't feel the need to change the form of the dates - but you'll welcome to. I'd always understood that the main priority was to have consistent dates in the article. I've added a note on the talk page to state that the article was written in UK English. --Cazo3788 (talk) 08:56, 18 November 2008 (UTC)

Well, this is from the MoS: National varieties of English. So I think you should take the banner about British English off the talk page.

Also, the article would benefit from inclusion of material about Bissell personally, some information on how he felt or his opinions. The way it is now, it is a very remote description. —Mattisse (Talk) 14:47, 18 November 2008 (UTC)

Mattisse, I don't think you've read the article thoroughly because if you had you would notice that:

1. Bissell died at the age of 30
2. He was a dancer, not a writer/philosopher - that is, dancers don't broadcast their opinions, they dance.
3. There is no official or unofficial biography of Bissell
4. He didn't write an autobiography

Therefore, this article is an encyclopedic account of Bisells's life, achievements and death. --Cazo3788 (talk) 11:21, 21 November 2008 (UTC)

• Ok. It is a very good article. —Mattisse (Talk) 19:17, 21 November 2008 (UTC)

Final GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): Well written b (MoS): Conforms to MoS

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): Well referenced b (citations to reliable sources): Sources are reliable c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): Sets context b (focused): Remains focused on subject

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias: Remains neutral

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

—Mattisse (Talk) 19:17, 21 November 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for your input, Mattisse. --Cazo3788 (talk) 20:19, 22 November 2008 (UTC)