Talk:Park Grill/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nascar1996 21:22, 10 June 2010 (UTC) with possible assistence form Julian Colton

Please Mark the Ones You Have done with  Done. {{done}} T%hanks. --Nascar1996 00:55, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

Infobox

• The logo needs to have the logo fur such as File:Shelby american 10 .png. It has to have it because it is unfree.
  • As the image page explains a logo consisting of only text is not protectable because fonts can not be protected.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:58, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
    • Okay. --Nascar1996 02:01, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
• The other image in the infobox is okay.
• The infobox also needs coordinates of its location. Done
• Illinois needs to be written out and it would also be good to have a flagicon such as .
  • AFAIK, flags are deprecated in infoboxes, but I spelled out the state name.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 02:02, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
• If you know the current owner it would be helpful. Done

Lead

• Some of the references in the body of the article needs to be placed into the lead, too.
  • There are two styles of WP:LEAD (cited and uncited). This uses the later where all content in the LEAD should be in the main body where the citation is. Redundant citation in the LEAD are not necessary.r--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:26, 10 June 2010 (UTC)
    • Okay I made a mistake please notice that this is my first GA-review, that is the reason why I have Julian for assistance. --Nascar1996 22:32, 10 June 2010 (UTC)
• The rest of the lead is very well written.

Location and views

• The first two sentences need combined like "The Park Grill is currently located in the Historic Michigan Boulevard District on North Michigan Avenue in Chicago, Illinois." Done
• The third sentence could be said better in my opinion, like "Cloud Gate, a public scupture, is located on the roof of the Park Grill." Done
• Image has appropriate tags. So no problem here.

History

• In late 2001, Matthew A. O'Malley and James Horan proposed Park Grill and Park Cafe to "provide both white-tablecloth meals and picnic-hamper fare for visitors to Millennium Park doesn't sound as best as it could be. Maybe try In late 2001, Matthew A. O'Malley and James Horan proposed Park Grill and Park Cafe to "provide both white-tablecloth meals and picnic-hamper fare for visitors in Millennium Park. Done
• The second sentence should have a comma after partnership, but before including. Done
• In the second sentence the word some should be replaced with several. Done

Background of managing partners

• In the first sentence, the complete names aren't needed (optional), and the sentence needs to be reworded such as The current manging partners of the Park Grill are Matthew O'Malley and James Horan. Done
• The second sentence, "O'Malley once worked for the U.S. Representative Dan Rostenkowski and runs the Chicago Firehouse Restaurant, an old re-purposed firehouse bought from the city and located around the corner from the home of Mayor Richard M. Daley, who has been a steady customer." should be rewrote simmilair to O' Malley, who once worked for the U.S. Representative Dan Rostenowski, runs the re-purposed firehouse, Chicago Firehouse Restraurant, which is located arount the corner from the home of Mayor Richard M. Daley. Done
• O'Malley also has been a business partner with the son of former Alderman Edward Vrdolyak. should be reworded similair to " The son of Alderman, Edward Vrdolyak, has also been a bussiness partner to O'Malley. Done
• This sentence - O'Malley and his brother Paul were picked to run the Clock Tower Cafe at the Sydney Marovitz Golf Course in Lincoln Park on the Chicago lakefront. needs to be reworded such as Matthew O'Malley and his brother, Paul, were picked to run the Clock Tower at the Sydney Marovitz Golf Course in Lincoln Park on the Chicago lakefront. Done
• The sentence that states Horan (James Horan is a restaurant owner and caterer who is president of Blue Plate Catering) needs rewording. I would give you an example but who is the president and he is the owner of what restaurant?
  • Is it necessary to enumerate his outside business ventures beyond what the article already does. He owns or owned other restaurants and catering businesses among which Blue Plate is semi-notable.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:02, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
    • Well no it is not needed but could make the sentence a whole lot better, while right now the sentence is very confusing. I would say remove it then. --Nascar1996 04:04, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
      • There is only one way to fix it I think, it would be --> James Horan is known for being a restaurant owner and caterer. The second half of the sentence makes it seem like it a question. Is Horan the president? Done
• The last sentence should be combined with the sentence above. Once the questions are answered I will give you a example. Done

Background of investors

• Other investors include relatives of Daley's political adviser Timothy Degnan,[11][17] two neighbors of the mayor, Ray Chinn,[11][18] an O'Hare Airport contractor, and Rick Simon, a controversial figure who runs a janitorial business and sits on the board of the Chicago Convention and Tourism Bureau. sentence should be split such as Other investors include relatives of Daley's political adviser Timothy Degnan,[11][17] two neighbors of the mayor, Ray Chinn,[11][18] an O'Hare Airport contractor, and Rick Simon. Simon is a controversial figure who runs a janitoral business and sits inside the board of the Chicago Convention and Tourism Bureau. Also is the controversial figure Rick? Done
  • Is there a suggestion or concern in there?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:22, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
    • I was wondering if Rick Simon was the controversial figure. --Nascar1996 13:42, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
• The rest is good.

Contract award process

• Pay to "to pay"
  •  Done
• The rest is also good.

Park District project manager's relationship with contractor

• After adding commas it is good to go.

The Rest

The rest is currently GA content.

Other

• There are some disamb links that need to be fixed here.
  •  Done I finished this to help you. --Nascar1996 01:53, 11 June 2010 (UTC)
• References, 16, 27, and 43 need to be removed or replaced because of registration (access issue).

Second Look

Location and views

• In summer would sound better if it was During the summer months, the outdoor seating area of Park Grill becomes the largest al fresco dining area in Chicago. Done
• Do the same for winter. Done
• The rest seems fine.

Summary

I will give you until June 18, 2010 to address these problems; for now it will be on Hold. Afterward, I will happily pass dpending on the articles history. Once finished please comment on my talk page. --Nascar1996 01:36, 11 June 2010 (UTC)

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality: Very well written.

   B. MoS compliance: Complies with required elements of MOS

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources: Reliable sources

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: Well referenced

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects: Sets the context

   B. Focused: Remains focused on the topic

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged,

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: Pass!

Congratulations, --Nascar1996 14:07, 11 June 2010 (UTC)