Talk:Pardosa agrestis

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Keremyucebas. Peer reviewers: Wikispiders11, SlyFox52, Sandeep525.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 02:06, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Student peer review

Overall, I think you did an excellent job on this page. The writing was for the most part, well worded, concise, clear, and neutral in tone. I edited some sections for clarity and minor grammatical issues. I also reorganized the Diet section, adding subsections for specific topics mentioned. Additionally, I added another photo - it is an unidentified Pardosa, but the markings resemble those described and shown in the taxobox image. SlyFox52 (talk) 05:13, 2 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Student Edits

One change I made to the article included slight wording changes to highlight what I think you really meant. For example, I changed “Slightly larger females range from 6-9 mm” to “females are slightly larger than males and range from 6-9 mm”.

I also changed the ordering of your sections in order for them to flow more logically.

One change I think you can add is discussing the non-sexual cannibalism in the “Food Scarcity” section in addition to where you have it right now in the Behavior section.

Overall, your article was very well written in terms of sentence structure and brevity. It had a very good flow of information, and it was extremely easy to read and extract lots of information from quickly.

Sandeep525 (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 00:47, 3 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Student Edits

Hi, I thought your article had a perfect balance between depth and breath. I liked that you gave multiple perspectives and hypothesis for why there may be long copulation times. It was all well balanced with a focus on animal behavior, which was great to see. I honestly didn't know how else to contribute so I added a small section on mating behavior based on an article I found. I researched how the P. agrestis are able to find females and I found that they use the silkline pheromone cues, which I thought was pretty fascinating. I also tied in the context of the research paper that this founding was also in, so I hope that doesn't confuse anyone. Thank you for sharing your article!! Wikispiders11 (talk) 06:01, 6 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]