Talk:Palomita Blanca (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:31, 7 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This will be reviewed by me over these two days --K. Peake 08:31, 7 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Should you really use & instead of and in the infobox?
Swap the release sentence with the writing/production one
"It is a bachata acoustic ballad track about" → "It is a bachata acoustic ballad about" per WP:SEAOFBLUE
"was met with positive reactions from" → "received positive reactions from" making this the first sentence of the second para instead
Remove "for the track" after accompanying music video
Move the award sentence to being the second sentence of the second para in the new order, followed by the commercial one and then music video
Pipe Latin Award to BMI Film & TV Awards

"Juan Luis Guerra released his seventh studio album," → "Guerra released his seventh studio album"
"his answer", Guerra states." → "his answer", Guerra stated." unless this is a book quote, then keep as it is
"new album in Miami. "I'm making" → "new album in Miami and he said: "I'm making"
"On February the following year, the singer gave" → "In February the following year, Guerra gave"
"and that would be released" → "revealing it would be released"
"Guerra's label, Karen Records, revealed" → "Guerra's label Karen Records, revealed"
"the album's productions" is the plural really suitable here?
"that it would still contain the aforementioned musical genres." → "it would still contain the genres he announced." or something similar, per this being a new para
Remove the word song after ballad because that is another way of saying song/track for a musical description

Remove accompanying before music video since the term for implies this
"called it a" → "called the song a" starting a new para at this point
"referred it as one of" → "referred to it as one of the"
"as one of the record's" I don't think this is the appropriate introduction for a quote focusing on a "piece"
"hits of the midnineties."" → "hits of the midnineties"." per MOS:QUOTE
"It was acknowledged as an" → ""Palomita Blanca" was acknowledged as an"
Pipe BMI Latin Awards to BMI Film & TV Awards
Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
"it became his" → "it became Guerra's"
Remove semi-colon at the end of the sentence

Copyvio score looks incredible at 5.7%!!!
Wikilink Broadcast Music, Inc. on ref 18
Remove or replace ref 20 since AllMusic chart positions can be edited anyone so this is unreliable

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; nice work here once again! --K. Peake 07:09, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the review as always. In regards to Allmusic's charts, the charts were provided by Billboard themselves as a license before the cost was too much for AllMusic (Source). For whatever reason, Billboard doesn't have a database for JLG despite him being one of the biggest Latin music stars. BTW, I don't know if you this, but I clipped articles from Newspapers.com and articles from ProQuest are free to us Wikipedia users (just go [https://wikipedialibrary.wmflabs.org/ here) to access them. Hope this helps! Erick (talk) 14:11, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Pass now, I did some brief copy editing but nice work on this! --K. Peake 20:33, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]