Talk:Pakistan at the 2018 Winter Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:30, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 08:30, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Background

• Wikilink Naltar Valley and Ski Federation of Pakistan
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Add a link to 2010 Olympic Games that goes to 2010 Winter Olympics
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Link 1948 Games to 1948 Summer Olympics
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

Alpine skiing

• Add a link to 2014 Winter Olympics in the words 2014 Olympics in Sochi
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "He said he was not able to train much in Pakistan due to lack of snow." - due to a lack of snow.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "Karim competed in the slalom event," - Karim also competed in the slalom event,
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

Cross-country skiing

• The wikilink for Winter Olympics should be in the background section
  • Added Kees08 (Talk)
• "Human is Kirim' nephew." - Kirim's
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "Human is in the Pakistani army in addition to his participation on the national skiing team. The Ski Federation of Pakistan founded a school in his village, the same village Abbas is from. He began training internationally in 2010–2011." - Source?, also the last sentence here should read He began training internationally around 2010 and 2011. or something similar
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "the same village Abbas is from." - change the word in bold to place to avoid close repetition
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• "For these Olympics, he spent time training in Turkey and Finland, along with some time he spent in Korea prior to the event." - change to For these Olympics, Human spent time training in Turkey and Finland, and also travelled to Korea prior to the event.
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

References

• Reference 1 is missing the author who wrote it
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• The publisher in Referneces 7 & 8 needs to be in the work field and italized since it is a print publication
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)
• Also, the work in Reference 8 should be The News International instead of The News
  • Done Kees08 (Talk)

Will put this review on hold to allow the nominator to take some time to read the suggestions I have raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:18, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: I have addressed your concerns above. Kees08 (Talk) 03:29, 12 July 2018 (UTC)

• @Kees08: Nice. Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 08:22, 12 July 2018 (UTC)