Talk:Paava Mannippu/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:30, 14 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will get to this soon. JAGUAR 15:30, 14 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Thanks for taking up the GAR, amigo. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 16:24, 14 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"is a 1961 Indian, Tamil-language, drama film" - I don't think there's any need for the commas. I based this on one of Pavan's GAs; "is a 1988 Indian Telugu-language musical-drama film", so it should be safe to lose the commas
an ensemble cast of:" - no need for the semi-colon
I've merged the lead's middle two paragraphs into one, if that's OK. Feel free to revert
"The film achieved cult status in Tamil cinema. It was dubbed into Telugu as Paapa Pariharam" - this would flow better if merged into one sentence: The film achieved cult status in Tamil cinema and was dubbed into Telugu as Paapa Pariharam
"In the meantime, Manickam, who has served time in prison for the murder Aalavandhar committed, is released from jail for good behaviour and joins" - replace the two commas with em dashes: In the meantime, Manickam—who has served time in prison for the murder Aalavandhar committed—is released from jail for good behaviour and joins
Wouldn't the quote box in the Cast section be more appropriate in the history section?
"becoming evergreen hits" - what does evergreen mean?
"Paava Mannippu was one of Bhimsingh's many successful films in the "Pa"" - I'm probably wrong, but wouldn't this need to be italicised if it's the series name?
No dead links!

This is very impressive work. It is well written, comprehensive, and well researched. I picked out a few nitpicks, but once they're all clarified then this should be good to go. Feel free to ignore some you disagree with! JAGUAR 18:43, 15 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Thanks for the GAR, Jaguar. All of your above comments have been resolved. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 07:24, 16 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I'll put the green circle thing on the top of the article now. JAGUAR 22:11, 16 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Thanks again. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 04:23, 17 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]