Talk:PDX671/GA1

GA Review

Passed. TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 01:50, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Another Believer (talk · contribs) 04:40, 19 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: TrademarkedTWOrantula (talk · contribs) 23:22, 20 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Yesssssss!!! I'm so glad restaurant articles are back! Anyway, I'm gonna claim this. TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 23:26, 20 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Looking forward to collaborating and addressing any concerns you might have. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 23:59, 20 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Prose is sparkly clean. Fixed a typo, but that's pretty much it.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Article has a lead section of sufficient length. Layout is correct per MOS:LAYOUT. Little words from the WTW list are present in the article. Fiction and list incorporation policies do not apply.
2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Reference section is present. No bare URLS spotted.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Nearly every source referenced in the article is reliable. Article is suitably referenced.
	2c. it contains no original research.	Spotchecking proves that the article does not contain original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Article is free of copyright violations.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	The business's description, menu, history, and reception are addressed.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Article does not go off topic.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Article is neutral; it does not try to promote or criticize the food cart.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Article is stable.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Images are tagged with their copyright status. Valid fair use rationales are provided.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Logo and food cart building are relevant (obviously). The food image is good (and tasty too).
	7. Overall assessment.	Dunno what funny thing to say here, so I'm just gonna type the first thing that pops up in my mind. "Buy crypto, suckers!" —Bill Cipher

Initial comments

Never heard of The Leaven Catholic Newspaper before. Is that source reliable?
- Removed ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:41, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Very nice Earwig report! Top result is at a 14.5% similarity.
- Like ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:41, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Reception section looks a bit sparse...
- I've folded into the prose what I could find. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:41, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Not sure why a second image of the food cart is needed (especially when it is very hidden)
- I think showing the environment in which the food cart operated is helpful context. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:41, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

opened the city's first and only brick-and-mortar Guamanian restaurant in 2019 - ~~What's it called?~~ Really recommend adding the name of it here
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:42, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Link "Kelaguen Mannok" to Kelaguen
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:42, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
visited the cart for
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:42, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Overall a well-written section. Immaculate!
- Thanks! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:42, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Description

Weird... zip codes aren't usually three digits long. Also, the area code for Guam is 671, according to this page. - Oh wait, I am right! XD Source #2 states, The numbers "671" make up the telephone area code for Guam.. Source #1 doesn't.
- Fixed ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:44, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Wait, but now the Food Network source is inaccurate... shall we bring back The Leaven Catholic Newspaper? TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 00:47, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

reflect[ed] the culinary influence of the cultures that have collided there -> "combined several cuisines within the city"
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Squirts of lemon" kind of sounds informal
- Removed ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Link scallion?
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Willamette Week's Michael C. Zusman said the flatbread's dough had coconut milk and butter, "resulting in magnificent, char-spotted disks that are simultaneously soft, chewy and ethereally fragrant". - Sounds like an opinion, which should belong in the reception section
- Fixed ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Gotta love lumpia <3 (sorry, I had to)
Tails & Trotters page uses "is", even though this article states the restaurant is "now-defunct"
- Fixed ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Why is red rice quoted?
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"that give the monochromatic (but vividly flavored) dishes some acidic pop" - Again, you could move this to the reception section
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 00:52, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

History

Link Western Culinary Institute
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
had ~~already~~ relocated
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Why was the electrical cord stolen?
- Because sometimes people steal things. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Link pop-up retail to "pop-ups"?
- I linked to Pop-up restaurant. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
PDX671 earned the judges' taste award at Willamette Week's annual Eat Mobile food cart festival in 2012. - Move to reception?
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Not sure why "Food of Guam" is quoted
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Same thing for "pop-up dinner"
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
What's Feastly?
- A restaurant. Fixed ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"[celebrating] indigenous Chamorro cuisine and the culinary influences from Asia, Europe, and Mexico that make it what it is today" - Wait, do we even need this quote? I can't think of a good way to paraphrase it.
- That's why I kept the quote. Felt difficult to paraphrase. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Remove hyphen between "chef" and "owner"? Otherwise, put an endash between the words.
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The pop-up inspired the chef-owner of the Island Girl's Lunchbox food truck, who attended, to launch a similar concept in Salem. - Kind of implies the owner did attend the event. Recommend cutting "who attended".
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Was the person inspired to launch a food truck specifically serving Guamanian cuisine?
- I don't think so, but I see this more as replicating the concept than the cuisine. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Guy Fieri visited PDX671 for an episode of the Food Network series Diners, Drive-Ins and Dives. He tried the Kelaguen Mannok, which he reportedly described as "simple, basic and dynamite". - Reception?
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
~~reportedly~~ described
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:00, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

"insanely good" in 2017 - Clarify: Was the flatbread at its peak in that specific year or was it praised during that year?
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"quietly serves some of the most delicious food in Portland five days a week" -> "serves the 'most delicious food in Portland'"
- Done ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Kind of seeing a "said-called" pattern here.
- I've moved two sentences down into the section, so hopefully this changes up the pattern a bit. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:04, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'm interested

What's your process for improving restaurant-related articles? Currently I'm feeling pretty burnt out from video game articles, so I want to broaden my skills.
Come to think of it, how do you even find restaurants to write about?
Often from lists. For instance, List of Diners, Drive-Ins and Dives episodes, James Beard Foundation Award for Best New Restaurant and other James Beard lists, Lists of Michelin starred restaurants, etc. Also, I enjoy writing about restaurants I've tried! ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:08, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@TrademarkedTWOrantula: I hope you feel I've addressed your concerns adequately, but let me know if any issues remain. Thanks again for reviewing! I enjoy collaborating and your suggestions/recommendations are helpful. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 01:09, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have finished your GA review. Congratulations, and take care. TWOrantula^TM (enter the web) 01:50, 22 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Spotchecking

Gonna spotcheck nine references. References are of this revision.
#1 Y
#7 Y
#12 Y
#13 Y
#16 Y
#18 Y
#19 Y
#21 Y
#26 Y

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