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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 03:30, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 03:30, 7 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, @Some Dude From North Carolina: I've addressed the below comments. DMT biscuit (talk) 18:40, 10 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

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Infobox and lead

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  • Infobox looks good.
  • I would remove the link to cliffhanger in the first paragraph per WP:OVERLINK.
  • That being said, I would also add a link to "To'hajiilee" in the last sentence of the first paragraph.
  • "freedoms then she" → "freedom than she"
  • Remove the comma after "much analysis".
  • Add a comma after "depiction of redemption".
  • "televsion" → "television"
  • "won the" → "won the award for"

Plot

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  • Plot is under 400 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
  • Remove the comma after "kill him anyway".
  • "leads to" doesn't sound right. Can I suggest changing it to "causes"?
  • The double use of "White home" sounds repetitive, so reword it.

Production

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  • In the image's caption, change "Breaking Bad" to Breaking Bad.
  • Link Moira Walley-Beckett, Rian Johnson, "Fly", Betsy Brandt, and Anna Gunn.
  • "Giligan" → "Series creator Vince Gilligan"
  • "Fly." → "Fly".
  • "self described" → "self-described"
  • "thoughout" → "throughout"
  • "enamoured" → "enamored"
  • "inconvient" → "inconvenient"
  • "or Walt" → "nor Walt"
  • "his short" → "his hair short" (avoid confusion)
  • "by placed" → "be placed"
  • Add a comma after "barrel".
  • "off screen" → "off-screen"
  • "Coexecutive" → "Co-executive"
  • A reference is needed for the first sentence of the last paragraph (recite it).

Analysis

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  • "of audience" → "of the audience"
  • The quote box for the phone call should be under the header.
  • "analysed" → "analyzed"
  • "view it a ploy" → "view it as a ploy"
  • "sympathise" → "sympathize"

Reception

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  • Are the mini-captions necessary?
  • Link Attack on Titan in the note.
  • "build up" → "build-up"
  • Remove the comma after "IGN".
  • "arc of victim" → "arc as a victim"
  • "on the each member of White family's arcs" → "on each member of the White family's arcs"
  • "appalued" → "applauded"
  • "as she begun" → "as she began"
  • "The show's honesty" → "the show's honesty"
  • "was described" → "were described"
  • "enprisoniment" → "imprisonment"
  • Specify the Primetime Emmy Awards ceremony where they won the three awards.

References

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  • Archive all archivable sources (either manually or with this tool).
  • Link each website used in every reference.
  • Currently there is a "reference invoked but never defined" so fix that.
  • There's also a "permanent dead link", so I would find a replacement or remove its content within the article.
  • Mark references from Esquire with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from Vanity Fair with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from Vulture with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark references from The New Yorker with "|url-access=registration".
  • Add the "|via=YouTube" parameter to the reference after "earth".
  • "GoldDerby.com" → "Gold Derby"
  • "EW.com" → "Entertainment Weekly"

Progres

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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