Talk:Otto Kittel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JonCatalán^(Talk) 16:00, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: Comments on the text and the review will come soon. Before commenting I will read the article and copyedit where I believe is fit. Feel free to revert anything you believe inappropriate.

I copyedited the text a bit, mostly reducing redundancies and marginally improving the flow. All in all, the text is concise and clear, and the article comes off as complete to a layman to the topic, such as myself.
Some things regarding the references:

Page rangers are shown with an en dash (the shorter one), not an emdash; by the way, the same goes for dates. In fact, all ranges between numbers are shown with an en dash. I changed the dates, but not the references (forgot to do them when I was copyediting). Done
Sources listed in the bibliography but unused in the referencing of the article need to be moved to a "further reading" section. This includes sources such as Bergström 2007, Bergstrom 2003, Helden der Wehrmacht II 2003, et cetera. Done

The article seems neutral, although you tend to use words like "score" a lot, which come off as slightly biased towards the pilot. However, I figure this is common language for topics revolving around aerial warfare during the Second World War. The only thing I would say to keep in mind is sympathy towards the Soviet victims. Done
File:Emil Lang Oak Leaves.jpg is copyright protected. Since you have a free image of Kittel, I'm not sure the fair use tag is justified in this case. Done

Otherwise, the article looks good. Once the above is taken care of I can go ahead and promote the article to GA. JonCatalán^(Talk) 17:25, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome! Give me a minute or two to promote. JonCatalán^(Talk) 18:22, 4 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]