Talk:Ottawa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 02:46, 18 April 2011 (UTC)

• The article is good overall, however, there are several places missing citations:
  • Nearly all of the History section (including the five subsections).
  • All of the Geography section (not including the Climate subsection).
  • In the Climate section:
    • "Ottawa has a humid continental climate (Koppen Dfb) with a range of temperatures from a record high of 37.8 °C (100 °F), recorded August 11, 1944, to a record low of −38.9 °C (−38 °F), recorded on December 29, 1933.[20] This extreme range in temperature allows Ottawa to boast a variety of annual activities—more notable events such as the Winterlude Festival on the Rideau Canal in the winter and the National Canada Day celebrations on Parliament Hill in July."
    • "Spring and fall are variable, prone to extremes in temperature and unpredictable swings in conditions. Hot days above 30 °C (86 °F) have occurred as early as March (as in 2002) or as late as October, as well as snow well into May and early in October (although such events are extremely unusual and brief). Average annual precipitation averages around 940 millimetres (37 in). The biggest one-day rainfall occurred on September 9, 2004, when the remnants of Hurricane Frances dumped nearly 136 millimetres (5.4 in) of rain in the city. The all-time monthly record is 243.4 mm (13.75 inches) set in July 2009.[22] There are about 2,060 hours of average sunshine annually (47% of possible)."
    • "High wind chills are common, with annual averages of 51, 14 and 1 days with wind chills below −20 °C (−4 °F), −30 °C (−22 °F) and −40 °C (−40 °F) respectively. The lowest recorded wind chill was −47.8 °C (−54 °F) on January 8, 1968."
    • "Freezing rain is also relatively common, even relative to other parts of the country. One such large storm caused power outages and affected the local economy, and became known as the 1998 Ice Storm."
  • In the Demographics section:
    • "The population of the pre-amalgamated city was 337,031 at the 2001 census, and fell to 328,105 at the 2006 Census. In 2001 females made up 51.2 percent of the population. Youths under 14 years of age number 19.3 percent of the total population, while those of retirement age (65 years and older) make up 10.8 percent resulting in an average age of 36.6 years of age."
    • "When questioned on their knowledge of Canada's official languages, 59.9% of the population reported speaking only English; 37.2% reported speaking both English and French; 1.6% spoke only French; and 1.3 percent spoke neither official language."
    • "the most popular religion is Christianity as 79.3% of the population described themselves belonging to various Christian denominations. The largest denomination is Catholicism, which claimed 54.2% of city residents. Members of Protestant churches formed 21.9%, Christian Orthodox were 1.7%, and 1.6% belonged to other Christian groups, including Jehovah's Witnesses and The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints. Non-Christian religion practiced in Ottawa included Islam (4.0%), Judaism (1.1%), and Buddhism (1.0%). Those professing no religion formed 13.3% of the population."
  • The entire Government and politics section.
  • Nearly all of the Transportation section.
  • Nearly all of the Culture section.
  • The entire Sports section.
• These are my other issues:
  • In the Geography section, the words "village" and "hamlet" is wikilinked probably 20 times, when it shouldn't be wikilinked more than once.
  • "The Queen's advisers suggested she pick Ottawa for several important reasons: 1) it was the only settlement of any significant size located right on the border of Canada East and Canada West (today Quebec and Ontario), making it a compromise between the two colonies and their French and English populations;[16] 2) the War of 1812 had shown how vulnerable major Canadian cities were to American attack, since they were all located very close to the border, while Ottawa was then surrounded by dense forest far from the border; and 3) the government owned a large parcel of land on a spectacular spot overlooking the Ottawa River." - I don't like this prose, since it is like it was in list format and then just collapsed into a statement. In addition, this is a very good example of a long and run-on sentence.
  • When you name the suburbs, villages, and hamlets, they are not in any particular order, such as by population or alphabetical order (e.g. "Nepean (135,000), Kanata (85,000), Gloucester (120,000), Rockcliffe Park (2,100), Vanier (17,000)").
  • In Seismic activity the earthquakes are arranged back words, with the first earthquake mentioned being from 2011, but the last from 2000; it should be 2000 first and 2011 last.
  • Inconsistency with the use of the percent ("%") sign (e.g. "those of retirement age (65 years and older) make up 10.8 percent" & "1.6% spoke only French")
  • The Economy section is very short, considering it is the capital of Canada. The Economy section of Washington D.C. has five paragraphs.
  • On Reference #17, the URL is exposing.
  • Reference #21 & 27 is a "dead link".
  • On Reference #31, there are words in all capital letters.
  • On Reference #32, I have a question, since when is Wikinews a reliable source?

Since a very significant amount of the article is unsourced, and all of the other issues, I don't think you can fix it all in one week. Therefore, I have no choice but to fail this nomination. You may try again once all of the issues are fixed/addressed.--12george1 (talk) 02:46, 18 April 2011 (UTC)

I've never addressed any revisions based on GA review before, so hopefully I'm doing this properly by responding below and striking through those above that I have processed. I couldn't find a StatCan citation for "... and fell to 328,105 at the 2006 Census." I'm quite fluent in available census data published by StatCan, and have never seen StatCan publish a former municipality's population two censuses after amalgamation/dissolution. I've only seen StatCan do this for the first census after amalgamation/dissolution. For Ottawa, StatCan published its dissolved population in the 2001 census, which was conducted five months after amalgamation. I'm concerned that the figure from the 2006 census may be original research. Hwy43 (talk) 05:48, 18 April 2011 (UTC)