Talk:Otokonoko Zuma

Otokonoko Zuma was nominated as a good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (April 20, 2022). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated.

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Note on the title

Although 妻 as a word usually is read as "tsuma", this title is indeed read as "otokonoko zuma" - see Mangapedia and Media Arts Database.--Alexandra^IDV 20:43, 26 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

This review is transcluded from Talk:Otokonoko Zuma/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 19:16, 31 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Review

Taking on review Mujinga (talk) 19:16, 31 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

earwig copvio check is 0% (but then all sources are in japanese)
pic has an adequate free use rationale and is relevant
sources appear reliable and article is neutral and stable, no original research

Comments on prose

"Premise" could be titled synopsis or plot, then split out from that the themes into its own section. then the references could be in themes - what do you think? I can see you have several GAs in this area already
Chapter 1–14 = Chapters 1-14
"Nico Nico News described him as attractive and full of what makes otokonoko characters charming, with the contrast between his gender and his appearance,[10] and NLab appreciated how characters respect Yuki's gender and treat him as a man regardless of his femininity and how he is the wife.[3]" - too many "and"s, suggest breaking sentence up
What is NLab for those who don't know? A magazine, a website?
Shogakukan is a company so "its" not "their"
" volumes in 2017–2020" suggest "volumes between 2017 and 2020."

Overall

Overall this article seems pretty good but lacking some structure per Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Anime_and_manga and as opposed to other manga good articles such as Classmates (manga), Samurai Champloo and Cobra (manga). For example, these all have a section on characters which would be very useful here since the volume synopses are otherwise quite confusing for me eg i wondered who is Kido on first mention. Perhaps a theme section would be helpful as mentioned above.

That's all I got on a first sweep. I'll put the review on hold Mujinga (talk) 19:35, 31 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Mujinga: Hi and thanks for the review. I've been sick and simultaneously very busy with work and haven't been on Wikipedia, but I wanted to apologize for not giving you any response. I'll try to get to this in the next few days.--Alexandra^IDV 18:51, 5 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Oh feel better! Thanks for the reply, if we are communicating every few days then I have no problem with the review taking a bit longer than usual. Especially when my comments were pretty short to begin with. Mujinga (talk) 07:43, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Alexandra IDV: no updates in two weeks makes me wonder if it's advisable to close the review and then you can renominate when time suits? I can give it a few days and if I don't hear back, I'll do that. Hope all is well, obviously real life concerns come first! Mujinga (talk) 17:27, 19 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Mujinga: Yes, I think that would be best. I'll implement your suggestions when I have the time to and will re-nominate then.--Alexandra^IDV 21:21, 19 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
OK! Feel free to ping me about it if you like Mujinga (talk) 15:29, 20 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.