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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 10:12, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator The man from Gianyar (talk · contribs) at 14:28, 12 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA criteria

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): WP:AGF that you'll fix minor errors later
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Comments

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General

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 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 14:58, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Detailed

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  • President Sukarno's fall from power — avoid linking two or more adjacent words
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:32, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • During the Japanese occupation (both in the lead and the "Early life" section) — specify "Japanese occupation of of the Dutch East Indies"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:32, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:01, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • In an independent Indonesia, he remained active in politics — should be "In an independent Indonesia, he remained an active politician"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:32, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • The "Early life" section should be split in "Early life" and "Early career".
 Half done – The early life section is a bit too short to be split up, imo. I've changed the section's heading to Early life and career to compensate. Cheers, The man from Gianyar (talk) 03:17, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Little is known of his early life, but he was educated in a — should be "Little is known of his early life; he was educated in a"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 03:17, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article writes it as "Indonesian Communist Party", but our wiki-article states the common/formal name to be "Communist Party of Indonesia".
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • in the failed — "in the unsuccessful"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 03:17, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the aftermath, Osa was — "Subsequently, Osa was"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • and sentenced to jail — would "imprisoned" work?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 13:34, 22 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • During his time in Boven-Digoel, Osa spent his free time — repetition of "time"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:43, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • earning a salary of 17,5 Gulden — the comma should be decimal. And suggesting to use Template:inflation.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:43, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • BPI — is never again used in the article. Do we need to define the abbreviation?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:01, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • he studied mass communication abroad — in which country? do the sources discuss this?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:43, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Following the proclamation of independence and the beginning of the Indonesian National Revolution, he served in the newly formed provincial government of the province of West Java. — this is repeated information. Already mentioned in the immediately previous section
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • and later the Indonesian National Party (PNI), after the Kediri Congress in 1946. — "and after the Kediri Congress in 1946, he joined the Indonesian National Party (PNI)."
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • he studied mass communication abroad. — Repeated information.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • between 28 August and 1 September 1963 — 'between' or 'from'?
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • President Sukarno gave a speech. In the speech, Sukarno chided party — "President Sukarno gave a speech; he chided party"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • 6 members — "six members"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Suharto then arranged — "Subsequently, Suharto arranged"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the third meeting, which took place on 24 March — " In the third meeting, which took place on 24 March"
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "reforming" itself. — can remove the quotes
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • a Heart attack — lowercase
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • on 3:00 p. m. — Add a non-breaking-space (Template:nbsp) between '3:00' and 'p.m.'. Also, no space between 'p.' and 'm.'
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 02:51, 30 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Cikutra Heroes Cemetery, Bandung — replace the comma with 'in'.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:37, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Images

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 Done – Sorry for the late reply, but finished adding the alt text. Cheers, The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:51, 24 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Done – Didn't realize I haven't added the {{done}} on this one. The man from Gianyar (talk) 09:50, 30 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

References

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  • Ref#24 should be cite-news, not cite-web.
 Done – The man from Gianyar (talk) 15:01, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Another nice work! Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:02, 2 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@The man from Gianyar, any updates? No issues if you are too busy, I am willing to keep this nomination open as long as you wish, assuring that changes would be made. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:21, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Oh yeah, this nomination. Sorry, I completely forgot (busy with IRL stuff), but I'll start updating it now. Cheers, The man from Gianyar (talk) 16:30, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Looking forward to image changes, but as a vast majority of the changes are made, I'll promote. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:17, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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