Talk:Orison (The X-Files)/GA1

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 13:45, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"At a prison, a man gets his fingers chopped off during a workshop in prison and all the people in the prison move very slowly to help him, while one man walks out at regular speed.", tad repetitive? The reader identifies the man is at prison from the first chunk of the sentence, so I guess it does not need to be reintroduced. Could do with a cleanup.
Tried to clean this up a bit.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:20, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The man is Donnie Pfaster" → "The man is revealed to be..."
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:20, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"After reading the first draft, Spotnitz and Carter decided to re-introduce Donnie Pfaster", reintroduce is not hyphenated
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:20, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"...making it the fourth most watched episode that week", of the X-Files? Suggest 'episode' is replaced with program or show.
Tried to specify. It's meant to be the most watched episode of any program, so I put that.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:20, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Only concerning issues I could find. No issues with sourcing. Very readable and comprehensive, on hold. -- Lemonade51 (talk) 13:45, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed all of your issues. Thank you very much for reviewing this article.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:20, 28 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]