Talk:Orchard MRT station/GA2

GA Review

Passed. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 04:52, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Nkon21 (talk · contribs) 16:58, 7 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Been here a lot too, review coming within the next couple of days. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 16:58, 7 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It has been more than a couple of days, eh.--ZKang123 (talk) 09:35, 11 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

My apologies, I've been a bit preoccupied with other things at the moment (including a FAC). I'll be sure to review this article within the next week. Thank you! ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 15:40, 11 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Add authors to sources that are missing them
Add alt texts to images Not done

Lead

Situated along Orchard Boulevard and underneath ION Orchard, the station serves various commercial and retail developments of the Orchard Road shopping district → It is situated along Orchard Boulevard underneath ION Orchard, and serves various commercial developments located in the Orchard Road shopping district

I prefer the initial form of the sentence.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Initially announced as Scotts → Initially announced as Scotts MRT station

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The station was part of the early plans for the original MRT network since 1982, and opened on 12 December 1987 with the MRT extension to Outram Park station. → The station was devised as part of the original MRT network in 1982, and opened as part of the NSL extension to Outram Park station on 12 December 1987.

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

In August 2012, it was announced that Orchard station would interchange with the planned TEL. → In August 2012, it was announced that the station would serve as an interchange with the upcoming TEL.

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Orchard station was designed as a showpiece of the initial MRT system and has a circular concourse with a radial granite floor design. → The design of Orchard station was intended ~~to serve as~~ to be a showpiece of the initial MRT network, utilizing a circular concourse with a radial granite floor design.

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

New suggestion

History

NSL

What was then known as Scotts station was included in the early plans of the MRT network in May 1982. → Plans for what was then known as Scotts station was devised as part of the earliest plans for the MRT network in May 1982.
- I think this suggestion repeats "plan" too much.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  - I agree actually, I think "What was then known as Scotts station was devised as part of the earliest plans for the MRT network in May 1982." would be better.
Orchard station was to be constructed as part of the Phase I MRT segment from the Novena to Outram Park stations; this segment was planned to be completed by December 1987. → Orchard station was planned to be constructed as part of the Phase I MRT segment from the Novena to Outram Park stations, which was scheduled to be completed by December 1987.

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This segment was given priority → Phase 1 was given priority

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Since its opening, Orchard station has been the network's busiest station, with an average of 35,000 passengers daily" — is it still now? If so, see below

It did change. According to recently generated data from official database, Raffles Place is higher. (Orchard: 56273 per day on weekdays, 67,694 on weekends. Raffles Place at 61,098).--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The current wording makes it sound like the station is still the busiest in the system, so the date of the source that reported the "35,000" figure needs to be incorporated into the prose.

Not done

Decided to remove this troublesome statement.--ZKang123 (talk) 01:08, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Since its opening, Orchard station has been the network's busiest station, with an average of 35,000 passengers daily. Some trains had to skip Orchard station due to overcrowding → Orchard station has since been the network's busiest station, seeing an average of 35,000 passengers daily, requiring some trains to skip Orchard station due to overcrowding
On 18 June 1991, a linkway to the Tangs department store opened; the linkway's opening had been delayed by a dispute between developers of Tangs and the Public Works Department → A linkway to the Tangs department store opened on 18 June 1991, following a delay due to a dispute between developers of Tangs and the Public Works Department

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

TEL

Orchard station was first announced as an interchange station with the planned 22-station Thomson line (TSL) → Orchard station was announced as the first interchange station along the upcoming Thomson line (TSL)

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Orchard station, part of the proposed line, would be constructed as part of TEL 3, consisting of 13 stations → Orchard station was set to be constructed as part of TEL 3, which consisted of 13 stations

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

S Iswaran → S. Iswaran

Fixed.--ZKang123 (talk) 12:02, 13 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The rest coming soon ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 19:41, 12 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Details + arch

Orchard station is an interchange station on the NSL and TEL. The official station code is NS22/TE14. → This is kinda choppy, how about "Orchard station is an interchange station on the NSL and TEL; the official station code is NS22/TE14."
Located along Orchard Boulevard, the thirteen entrances of the station serve various → Located along Orchard Boulevard, the station has thirteen entrances that serve various
The station has a general colour scheme → The station incorporates a general colour scheme
Intended as the "showpiece" of the MRT system → Intended to be the "showpiece" or the MRT system
circular concourse – the heart → circular concourse—the heart
Art-in-Transit programme, a showcase of public → Art-in-Transit programme—a showcase of public
allowing commuters to glimpse the vibrant shopping district → providing commuters a glimpse of the surrounding shopping district
Along the linkway is another work, Orchard Road from ION Sky, which depicts → Another piece featured in the station, Orchard Road from ION Sky, depicts

Replace all "LTA" or "www.lta.gov.sg" in the website parameters to Land Transport Authority for consistency

This is what I have for the rest, I also replied to some points above. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 00:30, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Addressed the above points. Also added alt text. @Nkon21:--ZKang123 (talk) 00:43, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Ok passing now as my concerns have been addressed, good job. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 04:51, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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