Talk:Ophioblennius atlanticus
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Great additions regarding behavior! The section you added were very well-written! I made a few edits to sentence structure to make some of the ideas more clear or flow better, but my changes were minor. I added a link for “antimicrobial” and a few [citation needed] tags in the "territoriality" section because it was unclear where some of the information was derived. I also added the class banner to the Talk page so that other readers/editors are aware that this page is the subject of an educational assignment. Good work! Claire.Edelman (talk) 17:40, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
I like the many subjects to behavior that you have on the page. That being said, I think putting it under one big header as “Behavior” to clarify that’s the overall theme of those sections is necessary. As such, I did it for you. In addition, what does “Swimming in Larvae” mean? It’s a bit confusing. Do you mean, larvae swimming? I don’t know what you’re trying to say, so I won’t correct it but clarification is needed. Your reading flow is done very well. I renamed “Mate Choice” as just “Mating” in case more information is brought into the page, it will be easier to add. Liu.Alexander (talk) 21:00, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
Very nicely done. The section on behavior is very well done with everything being organized into easily readable sections. I have changed some wording in order to clear up any confusions and to make it easier to read. Also there were some grammatical errors in the Swimming in Larvae section. Also swimming in larvae as a title seems to be rather confusing as to what it actually means. It would be nice if it had a simpler title that can give us an idea on what the section is on. junsu.shinn (talk) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.13.129.215 (talk) 02:38, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
Good stuff. Your additions are well written and informative. Some details: In the reproduction section you say, "One male redlip blenny usually has five nests, and the amount of time he spends at each is determined by its population." This is a little confusing. Do you mean its determined by the gender breakdown of the population? Additionally, the reproduction and mating subheadings are a little confusing and it's not particularly clear from the content how they differ. Maybe combine the sections with two paragraphs or use more detailed headings. I see that Alex changed mate choice to mating though I think mate choice is a better differentiation from reproduction. What do you all think? Otherwise, I think the sections are very through and I agree that organizationally, placing them under a Behavior heading is most appropriate. Andrewkamel (talk) 02:54, 1 November 2013 (UTC)
Thank you so much!!!! I made changes that you have suggested!!---------Hami910311 (talk) 22:25, 21 November 2013 (UTC)