Talk:Operation Frequent Wind/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hchc2009 (talk • message • contribs • count • logs • email) 19:11, 31 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

There are some prose issues to deal with early on in this article. I'm not a fan of "quick fails" for articles unless absolutely necessary, so if we can sort these out I'm very keen to carry on the review after that.

The major point here is that the Planning, Preparations on the ground, Options 1 and 2 - fixed-wing evacuation, Task Force 76, Tan Son Nhut under attack, The DAO Compound, The Embassy, Results of the evacuation, Chaos at sea and Casualties sections all need some substantial work on paragraph structures. In all of these, there are numerous one sentence paragraphs (e.g. "At 17:00 the first CH-46 landed at the Embassy.") that really need to be formed into proper paragraphs. While you can have single sentence paragraphs, typically a paragraph will follow a theme or idea through at least two or three sentences. Most of these paragraphs are far too short, and as a result the text becomes very "bullet point" like, if you'll excuse the phrase.

If you could take a stab at brigading the various sentences into paragraphs, I'd be very happy then to work through in detail the remaining points. Cheers! Hchc2009 (talk) 19:11, 31 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It's all gone quiet, so I'm going to have to fail the article at this review. I'd be happy to rereview at a later point however. Hchc2009 (talk) 06:12, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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